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Mithadan
10-21-2000, 08:27 AM
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The Chief Wight has posted a tale which I wrote on the Main Page under Fan Fiction. It is called Tales of Tol Eressea, and involves several very familiar faces from LoTR. I would very much appreciate any feedback you all may have on Tales. Feel free to be brutally critical (in a constructive way).

If people seem to like it, I may follow up with others. But no promises. Thanks.

</p>Edited by: <A HREF=http://www.barrowdowns.com/cgi-bin/ultimatebb.cgi?ubb=get_profile&u=00000002>RKittle</A>&nbsp; <IMG SRC=http://www.barrowdowns.com/images/oneringicon.gif BORDER=0 WIDTH=10 HEIGHT=10> at: 10/21/00 10:54:49 am

The Barrow-Wight
10-21-2000, 09:18 AM
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<img src="http://www.barrowdowns.com/images/posticons/bluepal.jpg" align=absmiddle> Re: Feedback please! Fan Fiction.

Mithadan,

I love your story. Well written with great style and grace. The sad tale it tells was wonderfully described. I was quite sad at the end, wondering if this might indeed have been how it was. I certainly hope to see more, more, more!!!

Thanks for sharing this,

The Barrow-Wight (RKittle)
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red
10-21-2000, 11:01 AM
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Mithadan!

It was awesome!

I often think about what Elrond and Celebrian's reunion must have been like. What a day!

Except that I cringe when I hear Elrond use the term &quot;methinks&quot;. <img src=wink.gif ALT=";)">

-red

"I am Aragorn son of Arathorn; and if by life or death I can save you, I will."</p>

Voronwe
10-21-2000, 02:51 PM
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Brilliant, Mithadan. Congratulations on a great piece of writing!


-Voronw
"voyaging the Dark behind the world, a glimmering and fugitive star."</p>

Taimar
10-21-2000, 04:34 PM
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Very well written, Mithadan. More, please!

Look into the http://www.fortunecity.co.uk/library/classiccourt/77/Mirror of Desire.</a> </p>

Elendil
10-22-2000, 01:32 AM
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Feedback!

Yes, it's a great story. More please. I had my doubts if anyone could tell what happened to the Ringbearers, but I really liked it! <img src=biggrin.gif ALT=":D">

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Mithadan
10-22-2000, 09:41 AM
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Re: Feedback!

For my 250th post here, I thank you all for your kind words.

To those who have not read it yet, please do, and be free with your comments here. What did you like and what did you not like? If Tales from Tol Eressea is to continue as a series, what would you like to read about? I already have a new, and very difficult, idea which I am trying to talk myself out of.

To Elendil, welcome and well met.

To Red, methinks you may be right. <img src=wink.gif ALT=";)">

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

Voronwe
10-22-2000, 11:30 AM
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Re: Feedback!

Though this may seem an obvious suggestion, I've always wondered what happened to Gimli after he departed for Eressa.


-Voronw
"voyaging the Dark behind the world, a glimmering and fugitive star."</p>

Elendil
10-22-2000, 12:47 PM
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Feedback!

Yes, and what happened to Legolas? And what happened to everyone in the fourth age? Tales please. Did ME just turn into Earth? I can't imagine.
BTW Mithadan, merry we meet.

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Gwaihir the Windlord
10-22-2000, 05:44 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Mith, I've really got to hand it to you. That was superb writing. Certainly among the very best of the downs's fan-fiction so far, and always will be. I really enjoyed reading that.
(BTW, If I may give a tip for your further installments, don't make them so long. I suppose the introduction is fine when it's long, but subsequent installments and chapters should be less than 750 words. Otherwise I am sure that these traitorous barrow-wights we have will not read the whole thing, and it also gives a sense of 'reeling 'em in'. Eh? What do you say)

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The Barrow-Wight
10-22-2000, 06:12 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

I don't agree with this, Gwaihir.... Stories/installments should be as long/short as the author likes..... Mithadan's story is perfect as it is! If anything, I was going to suggest you (Gwaihir) and I lenghtne our installments a bit.

The Barrow-Wight (RKittle)
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Mithadan
10-22-2000, 06:14 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Thanks Gwaihir! Especially flattering coming from you, since your series is excellent. I'm waiting on the next installment.

Re: Length, I knew it was running long but couldn't compress it. I also tried to find logical points where it could be broken up, but that didn't work either. The next one will likely also be long, but more amenable to being cut in two (or three or four, I always knew I was a wordy _________).

Voronwe and Elendil: Legolas is living with his family with the other Sindar. Gimli? Check the story. Elrond says that there are three graves in HIS garden. One would suspect that Gimli lies in Legolas' garden.



--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

Mithadan
10-22-2000, 06:19 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Whoops. Crossed posts.

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

Gwaihir the Windlord
10-22-2000, 06:33 PM
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Re: Length...

Well, I think that installments are best kept short <img src=frown.gif ALT=":("> . The introduction can be long, I think but after that the installments should be fairly short -- as I said, no more that 750 words.

But what did you say, RK? I should lengthen my instalments? Maybe I'm wrong, after all. How many words do you think I should be puttin' into them?

(Congrats on your evolution, Mithadan -- I see that you are now a Shade of Carn Dum!. All fear the Mighty Spirit...)

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The Barrow-Wight
10-22-2000, 06:38 PM
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Re: Length...

I don't know where the 750-word came from, but if that is what you are comfortable with, continue it, please. But your last installment just left me thirsty for more.

I am guilty of the same... short installments with long times between. If I was faithful to my fiction, I'd keep it short but regular. But I'm not. So I think longer is better.

Of course, there is such a thing as too long. 10,000 words is prolly too long.

The Barrow-Wight (RKittle)
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Gwaihir the Windlord
10-22-2000, 06:50 PM
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Re: Length...

Well, actually, as you said you were thirsting to read more, I was thirsting to write more. I restrained myself because I thought that it was better as it was, and if people did want more there was more chance that they would read my future instalments. So I hold myself corrected. From now on, my instalments may be longer, but they won't be that much longer. And I'll still try to keep them on a weekly basis; every Friday or so.

Usually keeping a lookout over http://pub24.ezboard.com/bmountgundabadMount Gundabad</a> and http://www.barrowdowns.com/cgi-bin/ultimatebb.cgi The Barrowdowns</a> Middle-Earth Discussion Boards</p>

burrahobbit
10-22-2000, 07:24 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

I had assumed that the third grave was Sam, and that Gimli was entombed somewhere else. (A dwarf under grass?!? Shame on you and all that shall spring forth from you in days yet to come! <img src=laugh.gif ALT=":lol"> )

What's a burrahobbit got to do with my pocket, anyways?</p>

Mithadan
10-22-2000, 08:56 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Well now. Did I say anything about grass? You haven't seen my working map of the island. A mountain range runs through the area where the Sindar/Avari have settled. However, if I'm not careful, more delays will come from naming geography than any other reason. I'm not up on my elvish dialects and the lost Tales are not going to be helpful in that area. Using the name Tavrobel is probably more than my share of &quot;poetic&quot; license. <img src=wink.gif ALT=";)">

BTW, careful with those curses. Remember what happened to Feanor. If you don't remember, you may soon have a reminder (hint, hint).

Hey Ron, is there any way to do the &quot;..&quot; over letters?

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

gamegie
10-23-2000, 12:08 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Mithadan

Your story looks great, I just printed it out and will read it tonight. My views will soon be posted.
Well done.

JAN 'GAMEGIE CEREZO

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Mithadan
10-23-2000, 05:45 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Thanks Gamegie. Look forward to it.

Gwaihir: Me? A Shade of Carn Dum, Mr. Frodo? With a long pale sword and all? ( <img src=wink.gif ALT=";)"> &quot;I'm slim shady, the real slim shady, all the other slim shadies are just imitating, so won't the real slim shady please stand up&quot; <img src=wink.gif ALT=";)"> )

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

The Barrow-Wight
10-23-2000, 07:03 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Mithadan, I don't know any way to do the special characters directly here in the forum. Usually i just write long posts in Word and cut and paste... the special characters paste here quite well.

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Mister Underhill
10-23-2000, 08:20 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Mithadan, each character in your computer has a special code. You can access these characters by holding down the ALT key and then typing a four digit code on your NUMBER KEYPAD. For instance, to get the character in Hrin, I hold down ALT and type 0250. Zero is always the first number. 0252 is . 0246 is . 0235 is . The equivalent caps also have codes. If you experiment a bit you can probably figure them out. Probably best to write down the ones you want to remember! This technique also works in Word and other Microsoft apps.

Also, just finished your Tales, Mithadan. Excellent start! Keep 'em coming! I take it from your earlier post that Sam is either still kicking or else buried elsewhere. Where, if not beside his beloved Frodo and Mr. Bilbo? More Sam!

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gamegie
10-23-2000, 09:16 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Well done Mithadan

I am impressed with your style of writting and how well you managed to make Sam talk like he did in the LOTR.

Your story has a very emotional ending to it, I nearly shed a tear.......

Would you be a writer? Or have you ever considered becoming one?

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Mithadan
10-24-2000, 05:39 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

I am not a writer by profession, but am, in a sense, a professional writer, though not of fiction. Yes, I have considered taking up fiction writing as a profession or avocation. Thanks for your feedback. I'm glad everyone seems to have enjoyed it.

I'm working on the next Tales From Tol Erresea. The subject I've chosen is more difficult, so it may take a while.

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

gamegie
10-24-2000, 06:00 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Well keep up the good work.
I look forward to reading the next one........

May I hazard a question though?

I did not really picture the ending and crossing from the Grey Havens to be like that. Is it only your view or have you read something like that elsewhere?

Charming Humble Hobbit</p>

Mithadan
10-24-2000, 06:14 AM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Just my view, details added via poetic license. Pure fiction and extrapolation. How would you have viewed it?

--Mithadan--
"The Silmarils with living light
were kindled clear, and waxing bright
shone like stars that in the North
above the reek of earth leap forth." </p>

Hannah Burrows
10-25-2000, 04:26 PM
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Re: Feedback please! Fan-fiction...

Beautiful I almost cried at the passing of Bilbo and was holding back tears at Frodo and Sam's passing. <img src=frown.gif ALT=":(">

" In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit . . . " That's where it all began.</p>

Joy
01-08-2003, 09:39 PM
Hi Mithadan! It's been a long time since anyone posted here, but I wanted to say that I read your Tales and loved them! The story of Maglor was wonderful. Also, Frodo and Sam - wow I cried - and that is a rare thing.

Thank you for such wonderful Tales.