HAIKU

[burrahobbit]

japanese poems
today have gained my fancy
now i share my joy

tolkien's world, nature
these haikus must have them both
because i say so

real haikus, proper
they must have some nature theme
wind blows on cold plain

it shan't be hard, though
middle-earth is full of it
all is in nature

and commentary
dont do it in prose
or ill make you pay

on that very note
my haikus proper commence
right after this one


HELM'S DEEP
here the dead mount high
the forest overtakes all
only wind remains

[ November 13, 2002: Message edited by: burrahobbit ]

[The Barrow-Wight]

oh golly gee whiz
poetic license lurks here
drivel becomes gold

[burrahobbit]

that's it, bee-dubya
about enough of your crap
negative nancy smilies/mad.gif

[burrahobbit]

burned and desolate
cut up, hacked to pieces, dead
wretched, vomitting

[ November 15, 2002: Message edited by: burrahobbit ]

[burrahobbit]

nothing, empty, cold
filled, brimming, evil, hot, cold
highest punishment

[Puretook]

Shadows of silver
glistening over the trees
A Mirror of Fate

[Puretook]

Leaves rustle in wind
Autum's whispers fill night's air
crisp and golden lands

[Melichus]

A fleeting shadow
White rider under the moon
Windswept plains of night

(That was supposed to be about Gandalf and Shadowfax... smilies/rolleyes.gif erm...

[Puretook]

Together with friends
laughter over golden leaves
Mug o' beer in hand

[Kalimac]

A golden circle
Binds its owner forever
My own, my precious.

[Puretook]

Puretook: Haiku Queen
Queen of Summertime also
and Licker of Knees

[Puretook]

Offending dragons
not the smartest thing to do
my body is burned

[Puretook]

sounds of war booming
whispers of death and of fate
night filled with bloodshed

[Diamond18]

That Fool of a Took
Gigantic Hill-Troll
The victor is crushed; must smell

Please slay me swiftly
For that was truly awful
Before eyes, life flashes

[Bêthberry]

Here's something Tolkien
I meant to give yesterday,
Now, burrahobbit.

Saruman

Prism-words twist and
Refract a many-hued voice:
Dishonouring Truth.


Bethberry

[ November 15, 2002: Message edited by: Bethberry ]

[Rimbaud]

Stars
Does she ever see
Stars as bright on black canvas?
My sweet tears - not yet.

Gandalf
"There's one way only -
To find the vile Cracks of Doom
And cast the Ring there!"

Provocation is a Tender Trap
And that sweet laughter
Tinkled through the sun-drench'd woods
And cast him in love.

Autumnal
Come and fall with me
Let Autumnal wist take us
Send us to sadness.

Enjoyable thread
burrahobbit friend
I will soon return.

[Rimbaud]

I forgot to say
A game is therein, above -
Which words are for whom?

Answer in the form, please
Of structure and cold control;
A poem, a poem, dear.

[Melichus]

A bit of haiku
To sate your poetic lust
"Nightfall in Mirkwood":

Branches sway and creak
Leaves rustle in the shadows
Cold laughter, silence...

[Gayahithwen]

I don't think I could
Write poems as good as this
Silently I'll watch

Maybe I shall try
How hard can it be to write
A haiku or two?

Two Trees in the West
Made of gold and silver
The Valar are proud

Telperion dew
Was made into stars above
The elves then woke up

[Evisse the Blue]

I am so sorry:
I don't have inspiration;
'Day shall come again'

That was inspired by Gayahithwen's post

smilies/wink.gif

[HerenIstarion]

All of online fans
(or 'ventilateurs en ligne')
Drying up my hair

[Eomer of the Rohirrim]

LotR is cool
I like Gandalf
And Legolas

Just kidding...

We come and go
Walking through the green
All the way singing

[Bêthberry]

Nightingale keens
at last on a darkling plain.
Evenstar eclipsed.

Frodo's mortal heart
was aroused by rain-drenched song:
River-daughter's laugh.
Yet title intrigues.
What tender trap do you read,
Poet, love or quest?

Leaf fall and lock lost:
Autumnal wist take Gimli
with Galadriel.

The form answering,
an expostulation now:
'Tis less cold control
than measured finesse,
distillation of desire,
intensity wrought.

Bethberry

[ November 17, 2002: Message edited by: Bethberry ]

[HerenIstarion]

Provocation is a Tender Trap re:

For Beren was alone
Save lobs all else forgone
Any maid would trap him

smilies/tongue.gif

[Dúnethalath Taurendor]

No time left,
to gaze at lothlorién trees,
for dark has fallen

[Neferchoirwen]

Black shapes on green grass
Legolas walks and gathers
Harvest of arrows

[Rimbaud]

Would words have their wings
If truly they were own'd by
Any one of us?

Bethberry, my praise
Thou art correct in thy thought
Panegyrics commence!

Would that all flowers
Grew as endless as sunlight;
I find them fleeting.

Love of the poetic -
Quest for the solitude that
Bears the Ring of truth.

[ November 18, 2002: Message edited by: Rimbaud ]

[Persephine]

Hello, I'm new here !!!
Please be nice and welcome me,
I'd be real grateful !!!

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[LePetitChoux]

We welcome you, Seph
To the downs of the Barrow
rest in peace, o wight!

I'm simply no good
at haikus and limericks,
all that sort of thing

smilies/frown.gif

[burrahobbit]

Hi there new person!
Your lovely haiku wows me
for sure, you can stay

one thing you should know
your avatar does not show
you messed up a bit

you need a web host
some place to put the picture
so others can see

i'm sure it's great, though
and i can't help find a host
maybe someone else

[Bêthberry]

Congratulations
on your personal title,
Perilous Poet.

So you would wish to
preserve imperishable
the fleeting flower?

Yet you grant words wings.
Sounds silmarillish to me,
confus'd signified

and signifier.
Respect Goldberry's wash day:
Ringbearer's lesson.

Although perhaps your
point is indeed that, but with
hint of Balrog's wings?

Bethberry

[Susan Delgado]

This is wonderful
One whole thread to be spoken
In lyrical form

I missed it before
It excersizes my brain
I enjoy it now

Master Rimbaud Sir
And the Lady Bethberry
Your talents wow me


Eye in the Mirror
He looks and sees his future
Sadness carries him

[piosenniel]

For Bb:


Seven stars,
a dark night sky -
Cold flames the burning briar

Tears, too,
spilled on the ragged page,
Inked thoughts run

[ November 23, 2002: Message edited by: piosenniel ]

[piosenniel]

Butterfly alight
on night's cold petal -
Ah! Wilwarin

[Susan Delgado]

oh, look at her now
the unicorn is searching
wait, that's not tolkien

always searching now
precious, where is the precious?
bagginses has it

little hairy feet
never wearing any shoes
they must be dirty

hobbits love to eat
it's always six meals a day
no wonder they're round

galloping the plains
feeling the wind in their hair
Riders of Rohan

with a hoom and hem
trees walking through the forest
fangorn is their home

he ran out the door
with nary a handkerchief
scatterbrained hobbit

they lost their treasure
still there under the mountain
the dragon has it

he guards his treasure
hiding under erebor
but still causes fear

song of the ainu
they helped create the world
eru's still the one

maybe they'll cook us
or squash us into jelly
oh look, there's the sun

[ November 24, 2002: Message edited by: Susan Delgado ]

[burrahobbit]

no prose in this one
nor even a limerick
don't do that again.

I know that you're new
but that makes no difference
please stay on topic

don't mean to be rude
but limericks don't belong
your post's deleted

[piosenniel]

Pleiades


High in the East they swing -
Remmirath,
the Netted Stars

[the phantom]

(I'm doing mine the way they taught me at my school with the pattern being 5-7-5,7-7,5-7-5)

Sauron forged a ring
Twas the ring to rule them all
Isildur took it

It fell into Anduin
Smeagol stole, then Bilbo found

It passed to Frodo
But Gandalf found its secret
The rest- history

[HerenIstarion]

Here among the willows
Wind is blowing softly
But the Sea reigns in my heart...

[HerenIstarion]

Dark under the hill
With the bare feet, no hat on
But green hood and Sting

He took the ring of Power
You think no Power guided Him?

...And he crept like mouse
Past Balin’s sharp eyes on guard
There are no chance findings...

[Nuranar]

Bright star from above
Cry - A Elbereth Gilthoniel!
Shadow, fear the light!

[Evisse the Blue]

When the Ring - unmade,
Elves departed in the west,
Truth became legend.

The ringbearers too,
To behold Arda unmarred,
Left the land they'd saved

[HerenIstarion]

Horror of his mind
Twisting and breaking all of
What his hand reaches

Pride and self centering will
Power gone beyond any heal

All is to grasp and
Make dependent and weaker
Lo! Orks now are made

[Rimbaud]

A word is a wing,
Is a wing a word today?
Tomorrow perhaps.

Flattery from ye?
Swift departing, fancy's flight
Should not be other.

Your Balrog tires so -
But a darkening flight of
Obsidian verse.

Yet, for thee a ray
Of pale sunshine through cloud pierce
In hard times for thee;

The bless'd are peaceful
The unbless'd walk alone, here,
In lonely grasses.

[HerenIstarion]

I breath when I drink
I drink when I breath
Is it the same?

[Aylwen Dreamsong]

What's going on, Wights?
Same Barrow chatter today.
The books, movies, games?!

We talk of those books
And well written books, they were.
Causing quite a stir.

We talk of movies
Number two is soon to come
Nearly three hours, wow!

What is left is ours
Those fun games called RPG's.
Write your own stories.

There's more to the 'downs!
Those people who make it work.
Administrators!

Can't forget members.
We all come from far and wide.
The same interests.

Thats the 'downs today.
Have fun and enjoy your stay.
Enjoy being dead.

I know you're thinking
My Haiku's are not proper.
But I'm no poet.

I'm just a downs member!!!

[HerenIstarion]

We read all haikus
And shout give us more!
Cheese is free...

[Nuranar]

Here are my efforts.
Judge them as you will; I try.
More will soon appear...

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Damp and dark. A glow
Lighting the path? Heed not the
Corpse-candles' way!

Warriors and their foes,
Long dead. Why do your faces
Yet remain, haunting?

[ November 27, 2002: Message edited by: Nuranar ]

[TheLadyAerowen]

*attempts*

Lothlorien-

'Within this forest,
there dwells the elven rulers,
The Lord and Lady.

The Lord of the Wood,
Who is known as Celeborn,
Or The Silver Tree.

Seek his elven wife,
The Lady Galadriel,
Keeper of the air.

For she will show you,
The Secret of the forest,
Your fortune unveiled.

Pour the clear water,
Look into the fountain's pool,
And what do you see?

Do you see the past?
Or do you see the present?
What of... the future?

(You can add this part
if someone is talking to
the Frodo Baggins) *lol*

You see what she sees,
The evil known as The Eye,
Will it corrupt you?

As the smallest hand,
You hold the Key of Future,
One Ring to rule all.

You will take it back,
or else Middle-Earth is doomed,
You hold our future.'


This is hardly done,
For I will continue it,
And get back to you. smilies/smile.gif

[HerenIstarion]

The thing that is gone
Is no more, for all it was,
And future ahead

Like a blue haze of unknown
Less real is than what is gone

Can’t set a tooth on
Neither one of those teasing grapes
Carpe diem, lady...

[Bêthberry]

Gracious, talented
Susan, my thanks. But my last
does not content me.

Rather say Tolkien
was no Baudelaire, his sense
of Beauty, e'er True.

Tolkien's Ru'n abstains
to gaze upon evil here.
Grey misjudges White.

Bethberry

[ February 21, 2003: Message edited by: Bethberry ]

[Nuranar]

More attempts, 'tis true;
More ambitious than the last.
What think ye, O wights?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Crumbled and decayed,
Remnant of a kingdom gone-
To you the king comes.

No glitter, but gold.
'Neath your stony gaze he duels
'Gainst these, your ancient foes:

Cold and dark are they.
The past is dead, but not they,
Servants of the Eye.

They flee. Silent ones,
Guard o'er your realm and keep it
For your king's return.

[Evisse the Blue]

Behold the bright stars
From the hand of Elbereth
They light up the night.

and because it's December, although it's not Tolkien-related, my very 1st haiku:
Today is Christmas
It is a beautiful day
Outside is snowing. smilies/smile.gif

[The Squatter of Amon Rûdh]

Though you defy it
Fate is inexorable
Your doom is in you

[ December 14, 2002: Message edited by: Squatter of Amon Rudh ]

[HerenIstarion]

Gate Opener
Click of iron hinges,
Well, I'm back...

[HammerTime]

Let me try my hand at Haiku

Balrog, Durin's Bane
A demon of the old world
Fire, flame of Udun


My god that was bad
I must leave this to the pros
Back to normal posts

[bombur]

Time withers flowers
From my arms, my lovers eyes
gaze beyond the waves

[Aragorn_The_King]

Haikus are not hard
Just make shure to stop at the
seventeenth sylab...

[bombur]

Haikus are hard. Try in a foreign language, for one. In finnish, every word has twise as many syllables, And I know not how finnish OR english compare to japaneese in this regard.

Not to mention the 5-7-5 syllable stucture is only one of the 3 requirements.

We all write "incorrect" haikus. True haiku is primarily a work of visual art. It is supposed to form a picture. It can have no soul searching, verbal tricks or philosophy. Also, it should ideally include all 4 seasons or otherwise encompass the passage of time.

I'm really proud of the earlier one of mine.

As attempts go, it's not bad.

[Keneldil the Polka-dot]

Deep piercing sorrow
Rage rends reason, Black hand burns
Finwë! My father!

Take rest Grey Pilgrim
In golden wood remember
Stand now White Rider

[The Squatter of Amon Rûdh]

Fire shatters on waves
Far lies our final haven
We scatter as ash

[ December 14, 2002: Message edited by: Squatter of Amon Rudh ]

[Keneldil the Polka-dot]

A pox on the rules
Write whatever comes to you
Your Haiku is yours

[Rimbaud]

Clever little stars -
Yet behind peaceful faces
Lies untapp'd sorrow.

[Gandalf_theGrey]

Lies untapp'd sorrow.
Truth, as fragrant athelas,
Heals stars' clarity.

[The Squatter of Amon Rûdh]

I saw Tolkien's grave.
A profound experience:
I wrote a haiku.

Beren, Lúthien,
Requiescant in pace
We do not forget.

[ February 21, 2003: Message edited by: Squatter of Amon Rudh ]

[Estelyn Telcontar]

Winter's hopeless death
Bears him, Hope incarnated.
Shall spring come again?

[Bêthberry]

Dance

If the stars embrace
their untapp'd sorrow, dare grief,
they would become wise.


Homage

Authenticity
clambers in the chill midnight,
spiked fence overcome,
embracing dust and
memory beyond time's grief:
Imperishable.

Bethberry

[ February 22, 2003: Message edited by: Bethberry ]

[Ithaeliel]

I am in grade nine;
I have not written haikus
since three years ago
Alas! what follows
may be truly laughable
and yet I will write:

On a loved one's grave
Green'ry is shadowed by white
Symbelmÿne fair.

Dark the world becomes
The voices of the Ainur
Draw her now closer
Land of bliss and peace
Valinor the fair calls her
She is passing now.

The greatest of kings
bent to the will of Sauron
Accursed Nazgul.

Choc'late in Arda?
Nay, there was no such thing, yet
Lembas was better smilies/biggrin.gif

{By the way, poets,
your wing'd words are well-written
I applaud your works)

[Bêthberry]

Provocation of Another Sort

A one-line lament
reminds the son of his fate:
A mother's lesson.

[Bêthberry]

A sweet confection
is no truffling matter,
Ithaeliel. *bows*
Your efforts deserve
Applause and commendation.
Tolkien, well-ser'ved.


piosenniel,
Rereading kindles mem'ry.
My thanks and high praise.

[Lindril Arvilya]

Drums, drums in the deep
Pippin, that fool of a Took!
Should have thrown in him.

Look, how a tree there
Grows among the rock and snow
Hope has now come here.

My book is yellow
It has an Eye on the front
It's looking at me

--------------------

Please excuse my bad
Grammar, I am so sorry-
It is kinda late.

Lindril (taking a writer's craft course and this is what I come up with) Arvilya

[the guy who be short]

Gwaihir flying high
King of all the eagles
Majestic and proud.

[Eönwë]

This thread seems quite good
Or was when people posted
Can we do better?

I will now try one
Just to see what I can do
Within haiku rules:

Frodo walks at night
With the ring around his neck
Silent in the dark

He goes to Mordor
The darkest land of shadow
Left in the third age

But with him comes help
Trusty gardener at his side
To help on his way

To fight the dark foes
The orcs and the cave spider
Far from the green Shire

Armed with their weapons
Sting and the light of a star
Through darkness they go

To finish the quest
To destroy Sauron's One Ring
There and back again

Continuing this
Is a very easy thing
Once you understand.

[Nogrod]

We should refresh this one but I have to admit that it might be too hard for us non-native speakers... I looked up the thread and not all seemed to be 5-7-5. With my understanding of word-divisions in English it probably is my problem but that really is a problem (as at least in Finnish the syllabification works in a bit different way).

But if you would be lenient with us non-natives we could try it as well. It looks like fun anyway.

[Eönwë]

bombur is correct
Our haikus are not perfect
But we can do our best

Five, seven and five
Are the syllables to use
If no-one objects

Yes it is quite hard
But we should give it a go
See how it turns out

You must try at least
Even if it may be wrong
But at least it's fun.

[Beregond]

Eagle flying high,
High above the mountains old;
"brrrr" he says, "it's cold!"

[Morthoron]

Iarwain Ben-adar is Stuck in the Sixties

Old Tom Bombadil
Dresses like a go-go girl --
His boots are so mod!

[Tuor in Gondolin]

Bilbo talks with Smaug.
The Spanish Inquisition!
Quite unexpected! :eek:

[Eönwë]

Good! I see this thread
Is moving forwards quickly
More than expected




The Witch-King walking
Slowly up and down Angmar
Trips over a stone

"Aargh!" cries the dark one
Screaming, arms flailing about
"There's a Barrow-Wight!"

[Tuor in Gondolin]

The Witch-King walking
Slowly up and down Angmar
Trips over a stone

Witchy:
"Hey, I get no respect.
You know what I mean?

Take Sauron...Please!"

[Eönwë]

Witchy:
"Hey, I get no respect.
You know what I mean?

Take Sauron...Please!"

Now try and put that in Haiku ;)

[Tuor in Gondolin]

John Cleese sees Witch-King
Commisssioner Silly Walks
Rejects his pratfall