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I just made up this song...it's not very good but I'd like your opinion :)
The Elves were the immortal,
The graceful, The good. The Elves were the wisest, The fairest, The first. The Dwarves were the miners, The craftsmen, The short. The Dwarves were the delving, The bearded, The rash. The men were the foolish, The Kings, The strong. The men were the swordsmen, The greedy, The rulers. The hobbits were the mischievous, The jolly, The fun. The hobbits were the ale lovers, The friendly, The Halflings. |
Very nice *CLAP CLAP CLAP* [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]
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Sounds good to me. Almost puts me in mind of Treebeard's list. Hurrah for poets and songs! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
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yes, splendid.. very good! *round of applause*
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I like it, but I must say that it makes humans sound like bad people.
"Yes there is fraility, there is weakness:But there good and honor to be found in men." I know that isn't the exact quote but it's true. |
Thats beautiful! I love it!
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Um... is it copyrighted? I'd love to have the verse on the men in my signature...
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That was great. Treebeard does come to mind [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]
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Very good. Since you said it was a song, does it have a tune? [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]
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I like it. It does bring Treebeard's lists to mind. Since you did ask for opinions, I'll give a little creative criticism from one writer to another: it's good, it's creative, it's catchy, but the rhythm is a bit shaky in places. Also it seems to me that it's missing something. An ending that ties all the races together perhaps. But it's your work, not mine, and that's simply my opinion, so do what you will. Once again, nice work. I know how much guts it takes to post poetry, lyrics, or even stories for the world to see. Cheers.
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Thanks! I'll save it up for my next signature change [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
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I like this poem but I am just a tad bit confusend. [img]smilies/confused.gif[/img]
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very good, but men arent really that strong, as compared to say, elves. both physically and mentally. and it'd be better if you presented an even view of them
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