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Rindoien, elf of Lothlorien 05-10-2003 01:47 PM

I just made up this song...it's not very good but I'd like your opinion :)
 
The Elves were the immortal,
The graceful,
The good.
The Elves were the wisest,
The fairest,
The first.

The Dwarves were the miners,
The craftsmen,
The short.
The Dwarves were the delving,
The bearded,
The rash.

The men were the foolish,
The Kings,
The strong.
The men were the swordsmen,
The greedy,
The rulers.

The hobbits were the mischievous,
The jolly,
The fun.
The hobbits were the ale lovers,
The friendly,
The Halflings.

Catherine 05-10-2003 01:53 PM

Very nice *CLAP CLAP CLAP* [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Yavanna228 05-10-2003 02:08 PM

Sounds good to me. Almost puts me in mind of Treebeard's list. Hurrah for poets and songs! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]
Peace

ElenCala Isil 05-10-2003 02:51 PM

yes, splendid.. very good! *round of applause*

Rose Cotton 05-10-2003 02:58 PM

I like it, but I must say that it makes humans sound like bad people.

"Yes there is fraility, there is weakness:But there good and honor to be found in men." I know that isn't the exact quote but it's true.

Meela 05-10-2003 03:29 PM

Thats beautiful! I love it!

Meela 05-10-2003 03:30 PM

Um... is it copyrighted? I'd love to have the verse on the men in my signature...

elven maiden Earwen 05-10-2003 07:11 PM

That was great. Treebeard does come to mind [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]

Luthien_ Tinuviel 05-10-2003 07:15 PM

Very good. Since you said it was a song, does it have a tune? [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Feanor of the Peredhil 05-11-2003 03:43 PM

I like it. It does bring Treebeard's lists to mind. Since you did ask for opinions, I'll give a little creative criticism from one writer to another: it's good, it's creative, it's catchy, but the rhythm is a bit shaky in places. Also it seems to me that it's missing something. An ending that ties all the races together perhaps. But it's your work, not mine, and that's simply my opinion, so do what you will. Once again, nice work. I know how much guts it takes to post poetry, lyrics, or even stories for the world to see. Cheers.

Fea

Rindoien, elf of Lothlorien 05-16-2003 09:36 AM

Quote:

Um... is it copyrighted? I'd love to have the verse on the men in my signature...
Yeah, if you want. You could quote me though..and by the way, it's not really a song, more of a poem [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Meela 05-16-2003 11:20 AM

Thanks! I'll save it up for my next signature change [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

polices 05-17-2003 10:14 PM

I like this poem but I am just a tad bit confusend. [img]smilies/confused.gif[/img]

the guy who be short 05-18-2003 04:28 PM

very good, but men arent really that strong, as compared to say, elves. both physically and mentally. and it'd be better if you presented an even view of them


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