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Old 09-18-2002, 03:05 PM   #302
Thenamir
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One last nit-pick, Rim:

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Thenamir followed his new guide Volkmar who moved with a speed and stealth which belied an obviously lame and stiff-braced leg.
I apologize if one of my previous posts was ambiguous, but Thenamir is not favoring his left leg -- that is, any more than he is favoring the rest of his sore and slightly scorched person. I was referring in that post to Volkmar, whose backstory indicated that his leg was injured sometime before and was permanently braced.
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Volkmer's left leg did not heal right. Despite the brace, he still walks with a limp. Running is much harder and more painful.
Just thought I'd clear that up. Other than that, the revision looks good!

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