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Arvedui III · 04-19-2003, 03:02 PM

Erm, sure. Well, I thought maybe my character could have been the last to see the errand riders or have him see the attack or something along those lines.

Ok, um here's a first post:

A blast of cold air swept over the deceptively sunny landscape. A man stepped out of his house in time to see a small figure heading toward the riverbed below. "Right on time." He muttered, and ran to the man now struggling with a little boat. "Galn, Galn" the man called to the figure who in turn looked up. "Thurin, not now please." The figure called Galn said as curtly as possible while trying hard to shove the boat into the river. "I know you had a letter." Said the man called Thurin as though this proved Galn had done something terrible. "Good for you, um, is there something incredibly important going on, or did you come down at this hour to tell me I got a letter?"

Said Galn between clenched teeth, now forcing all his might into shoving the boat out of the sandy bank. "Well," said Thurin embarrassed, "well, you know. Since you're the one with all the news, I thought," At this Galn chuckled. "Look, help me with the boat and I'll tell you what the letter said." "Really?" Said Thurin breathlessly, and then he also began struggling with the boat. Suddenly, the boat slid gently into the already icy water and both men fell forward into the sand.

"Hope your well, much love, mother." "Huh?" "That's what the letter said." Said Galn chuckling, before picking himself up gingerly. "Errand rider brought me it on his way to Pelargir." "Oh." Thurin muttered dejectedly, now also getting up. "Look, if you want to know, the city's getting worried." "About what?" "Mordor" said Galn darkly, now lowering his voice. "They think, I dunno, but things are getting strange. That's all" and Galn hopped in his boat. "I'm more worried about Umbar, you know Nin's cousin got kidnaped." Thurin added. "Umbar won't do anything but kidnap unless Mordor does something. Just stay away from the coast and you'll be fine." Galn called, the hard winds already taking his boat away from shore.

"You're daft, you know. That boat will break, if not today, then sometime soon. You should stay home." Thurin yelled back, inwardly proud he knew something that Galn didn't. A storm was coming.

Um, hope that works.

EDIT: Ahhh, I think I defined ridiculously long post. Sorry ‘bout that.
Arvedui

[ April 19, 2003: Message edited by: Arvedui III ]

04-19-2003, 03:02 PM	#18
Arvedui III Ghost Prince of Cardolan Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: In Rohan, with Carolina on my mind Posts: 629	Erm, sure. Well, I thought maybe my character could have been the last to see the errand riders or have him see the attack or something along those lines. Ok, um here's a first post: A blast of cold air swept over the deceptively sunny landscape. A man stepped out of his house in time to see a small figure heading toward the riverbed below. "Right on time." He muttered, and ran to the man now struggling with a little boat. "Galn, Galn" the man called to the figure who in turn looked up. "Thurin, not now please." The figure called Galn said as curtly as possible while trying hard to shove the boat into the river. "I know you had a letter." Said the man called Thurin as though this proved Galn had done something terrible. "Good for you, um, is there something incredibly important going on, or did you come down at this hour to tell me I got a letter?" Said Galn between clenched teeth, now forcing all his might into shoving the boat out of the sandy bank. "Well," said Thurin embarrassed, "well, you know. Since you're the one with all the news, I thought," At this Galn chuckled. "Look, help me with the boat and I'll tell you what the letter said." "Really?" Said Thurin breathlessly, and then he also began struggling with the boat. Suddenly, the boat slid gently into the already icy water and both men fell forward into the sand. "Hope your well, much love, mother." "Huh?" "That's what the letter said." Said Galn chuckling, before picking himself up gingerly. "Errand rider brought me it on his way to Pelargir." "Oh." Thurin muttered dejectedly, now also getting up. "Look, if you want to know, the city's getting worried." "About what?" "Mordor" said Galn darkly, now lowering his voice. "They think, I dunno, but things are getting strange. That's all" and Galn hopped in his boat. "I'm more worried about Umbar, you know Nin's cousin got kidnaped." Thurin added. "Umbar won't do anything but kidnap unless Mordor does something. Just stay away from the coast and you'll be fine." Galn called, the hard winds already taking his boat away from shore. "You're daft, you know. That boat will break, if not today, then sometime soon. You should stay home." Thurin yelled back, inwardly proud he knew something that Galn didn't. A storm was coming. Um, hope that works. EDIT: Ahhh, I think I defined ridiculously long post. Sorry ‘bout that. Arvedui [ April 19, 2003: Message edited by: Arvedui III ] __________________ I have no idea what you just said, but I'm inspired!