Faye-
About that last post. Your character transforming is a good idea, but could you delete that post and put it back in later in the story? Right now it's not a good time in the story to add it in. It would be better if that part had an explanation or reason why it was happening at that moment. For example, you could have her do something signifigant or save the group before she transforms. (Kind of like an angel earning her wings.) Also, it'll make it easier for me to respond considering my character is unconsious at the moment.
Also, could you please post a new profile for your character? Since she's not really a hobbit anymore, your bio is not really accurate.
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