Sam's speech needs to be shorter - much shorter. By about 1/2 I think. It needs to feel like conversation, not a soliloquoy. Break it up and make it part of a conversation.<P>Yes, Tolkien does lend himself to soliloquoy, but since they managed to avoid it with Gandalf, Elrond and Aragorn, it's certainly possible to avoid it with Sam. Especially since making long thought-out speeches is out of character for Sam.
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Deserves death! I daresay he does... And some die that deserve life. Can you give it to them?
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