I'm aorry to be posting so much, but I just reviewed a little bit of the earlier pages.
I agree that it is okay to weave some sexual relationships. After all, it is compltely normal.
Also, language is okay since it is true people use 'bad' words occasonallym, so there shouldn't really be a problem, after all, you should see what I write.
I'm on
www.fanfiction.net as well, and there you can post whatever you want. It is best to have ratings on your works.