Dragon Elf odin Ragnorock
Please look at Envinyatar's post #67 above:
He asked if you would revise your First Post and gave you an example of how it might be done:
Quote:
Dragon Elf odin Ragnorock's post --- REVISED
After a semi peaceful night Menecar woke up to the sound of birds chirping and a great day for traveling with his companion. It was a peaceful day has begun with the sun shining through the trees. They had a half a days travel by horse to Bree left to go.
“Do you think that there will be people waiting for us to arrive at the Prancing Pony?” asked Menecar’s companion.
“I think there would be. I don’t think that King Elessar would let two Rangers do this alone,” said Menecar.
Suddenly Menecar heard the sound of leaves moving in the woods. He stopped to listen, and to see if he heard the sound again. Sure enough there it was again, but it sounded louder as if the thing or things were getting closer. He looks over at his companion to see if he heard the same sound. He does indeed look as if he has. Menecar rode over to him and says, “Did you hear the sound of leaves?”
“Yes, indeed.”
“The sound,” whispers Menecar “is drawing closer.”
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Is this OK with you? Or can you go back to your original post and make the changes that are necessary so that your post and Menltarmacil's fit together better. (Meneltarmacil's post will come first on the game thread - yours needs to pick up on his from what he's said in it.)
Thanks!
~*~ Pio, Game Moderator