Menel, I guess I should have been more specific. It was your character immediately resorting to violence that needs to be revised. And it wouldn't matter if they didn't see anybody else involved. The King's Men would still use it as an "excuse" for retaliation in ways that the Faithful would at all costs avoid. Besides, if this is to be the kind of story worthy of Tolkien, the start should leave room for the really intense and powerful toward the end; and if we resort to violence early, we remove that as a story telling option that has any power down the road.
Himaran, are you aware that the Faithful are Numenoreans? Your posts and bio suggest to me that your characters may not know this.
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