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Old 10-25-2005, 11:05 AM   #5
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Stop looking at me like that... I remembered the deadline. I just ignored it - spawn had to go somewhere, and seeing as she represents a third of the poets, I didn't think it prudent to start any discussion without her. Additionally, I thought it would give time for more poems to come in, but unfortunately this hasn't happened.

So we reach discussion. Remember, everybody can participate. Even non students.


So then, a little explanation and a few facts about my poem.

Firstly, the title, which can be interpreted to mean "The History of the Gnomes" was once the title of the Silmarillion. As can be guessed, I wanted to render some of the Silm into Quenya poem form, as it was obviously meant to be.

There were a few problems with this. The Silm is very big, and Quenya vocab very small. I originally planned to call this first part of The History "Noldolante" (Fall of the Noldor) to mirror Maglor's song lamenting the fall of the Noldor. Unfortunately, I didn't have enough time (or put in enough effort, interpret this as you will) to get to Alqualonde.

As the deadline loomed, I had to wrap the poem up very quickly. I think this makes the last stanzas very weak - they were rushed.

Obviously, I followed a rhyme scheme, but I did become a little sloppier afterthe first few stanzas. There are various lines I'm unhappy with, but overall, with a little sprucing up, I think it works.
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