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Well well. The Hunter Eonwe and I shall preserve this story...very interesting the way we were punished proportionally to the innocents we hanged.
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I couldn't have everyone survive in the ending, it would seem wrong and killing people at random would seem wrong too. So I let you choose for yourselves.
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Well...I've survived at last. Thanks for a fine game Sleepy!
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My pleasure, thanks for playing.
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As with the storyline and writing. Thinlómien told me (thought she knew), that you are not a native English-speaker. To that end you did very well in your writing - and I kind of agree with Jenny's thoughts about you getting better all the time.
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How does Thinlo know? But oh well, not that I've ever kept it a secret and heres another bone for you to chew on, I'm fifteen, just turned fifteen a month back actually.
Thanks! ^_^
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The end scene might have had some clichées in it, and partially it could be seen as somewhat bombastic. But there were nice ideas too, and knitting the "hints" to a stortyline was well done anyway - even though one kind of guessed the meaning of those red marks beforehand and so there were not a special surprise-element in it... Well done!
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Well it isn't the real end, trust me the short story will have the ending done much better and it should explain ever little detail that hasn't been covered here. (ie; the motive, the planning etc.) Yea, they weren't really meant to be a surprise anyway. :/
But anyway I'm glad people enjoyed my writing! Point to be noted, this was just a teaser I actually write better than this... >_>
Well at least in my book, I'm not going to post an ad on the 'Downs but if anybody is interested feel free to PM me for details about it! ^_^