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Originally Posted by Nogrod
Great post Folwren!
But Sythric probably isn't lying down, half dead... He has been hit with a sword (from up to down) to the side - and he has a nasty slash-wound (and it hurts!). But as he discovers Raedwald dead, he will be infuriated, and will ride up to the ridge, seeking for revenge - and saving of the others - calling anyone able to come with him (he takes Raed's lance to pay back).
If you care to change your post with that in view? You could write anything about seeing Sythric running to see Raed., getting quite shocked for a moment, taking Raed's lance and calling Thydrė - asking all to come with him. You might also note, that he seems to be in great pains himself all the time, and bleeding from his side... Pick what you want from these - or don't use them. As you wish.
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Okay, I knew that he was wounded pretty badly, but I wasn't sure where he was or what he was doing. I'll change that as soon as possible. But I can't get to it now. I have lots and lots of work to do yet today before I write anything more. I will, however, fix it later today.
Edit: I moved my post below your save, Nogrod, because it appeared that your post should go before mine. Hope no one minds.
Still haven't actually corrected it.
Edit #2: Okay, I've fixed it. Does that look alright?
-- Folwren