Hi,
1. Rog
Really, this is very difficult for me to argument a choice here.
For esthetic preference I prefer Rôg.
2. The two poems
About Horns of Ylmir
I like the new introduction of this poem that agree with "the land of willows".
The new corrections looks good for me.
The exchange of died and cease come from my edition of Home (English version). But anyway the sentance looks good now !
Just a little detail, there is the word Gods in the sentance
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When the world reeled in the tumult as the Great Gods tore the Earth
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Following another changer, we need to use the word "Lords"
About Lay of Earendil
See point 4
3. The minute issue of "tallest of the Children of the World"
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tallest of {all} [living] Children of the World, save thingol
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I disagree with this change.
It's look for me like tallest of all except this ... and that ... and we don't count this one ...
I have no better solution but I don't like this result
4. Where to put the chapter break
In my private work of Revised Silmarillion ( a work about all the Revised Silmarillion arrangement - but not about text details) I have always thinking that the Fog break is :
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Yet now those exiles of Gondolin dwelt at the mouth of Sirion by the waves of the Great Sea [, and joined their folk to the slender company of Elwing daughter of Dior, that had fled thither little while before]. There they take the name of Lothrim, the people of the flower, for Gondolindrim is a name too sore to their hearts; and fair among the Lothrim Eärendil grows in [the Isle of Sirion in] the [snow-white stone] house of his father, and the great tale of Tuor is come to its waning.'
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So it makes happy that every body enjoy this new end.
About the insert of the Lay, it look good for me.
About the changes, nothing ... I agree.
5. Is Gil-Galad at the Havens or on Balar?
6. The Elessar
7. The Oarni
The last 3 points, I agree but in the futur, when we will work the last chapter, I think it will be good to reopen the problems.
8. About Mechanical Dragons.
6 months after, I answer about that ... sorry it was incredible busy time for me ( and specialy a wedding in the end of august 2003 that was the discussion period
and I miss this part ... thx maedhros!)
I agree with the new vision - amazing work Fingedil.
9. About publishing .... on the board first
A new PDF version is ready, checked by Maedhros.
I hope I forgot nothing.
A good thing can be a ultimate checking by active members. I can send by email a PDF or a word document.
Fingedil, Lindil, Aiwendil PM me on my personnal mail (cf my account).