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Old 01-15-2006, 03:17 PM   #27
Aiwendil
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FG-RG-27: I think your suggested line is too long, but we could make it:

Quote:
NA-RG-27{So fearful his face that Flinding crouched
and}[Gwindor] {watched him}, wonder{ing}ed what webs of doom
FG-RG-73: Again, I think your line has one too many strong syllables. I suppose we could try:

Quote:
NA-RG-73 and {Flinding}[Gwindor] knew it {at the feet of the king
like {stone graven} graven stone {standing silent}
I don't know whether ". . . like graven stone" makes sense without "standing silent" though.
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