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Originally Posted by Huinesoron
A sketch! Eeeexcellent. After a quick singthrough, here are the lines that seem not to currently fit (ignoring cha-a-sms and fa-ate), along with suggestions on how we could fill the [mis][sing] [beats].
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Thoughts?
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I think most of these silent beats / long syllables were fine. As long as it sings, it sings. I think content takes priority over exact meter here mostly.
I like "up into morning sky blue", I think it makes it easier to sing.
"No longer trapped by barred gate" though implies it once was trapped... and I am no longer sure what Amarie means again.
I think the line works if "not trapped" goes as 2 regular (slower) beats instead of a triplet.