Dear Stone of Vision,
You wrote:
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My heart is flying toward you on wings of fear...
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It's good, I think. I really admire your ability to write English poetry, being from France???
I have a few questions that I think are just translation-kinds of issues. English grammar. Maybe if you could clarify them for me?
"rightful"-- I'm not sure what you mean by this. Righteous maybe? What is it that the speaker is trying to say there?
I think *of* should be *that*, here, does that sound right?
Just the feeling *of* something bad is happening
Also I think "anguish resonates" would work better... English, again... how does that sound to you?
But hey, ***IT'S GOOD**...
[ June 17, 2002: Message edited by: mark12_30 ]