Originally posted by Aiwendil
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I am inclined toward this as well, but the difficulty is that this would require the fabrication of some text to describe the outcome of Rog's attack. I cannot see any other way of doing it at the moment.
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How about this:
FG-B-03b
§ 70 Then said Rog in a great voice: "Who now shall fear the Balrogs for all their terror? See before us the accursed ones who for ages have tormented the children of the Noldor, and who now set a fire at our backs with their shooting. Come ye of the Hammer of Wrath and we will smite them for their evil." Thereupon he lifted his mace, and its handle was long; and he made a way before him by the wrath of his onset even unto the fallen gate: but all the people of the Stricken Anvil ran behind like a wedge, and sparks came from their eyes for the fury of their rage. A great deed was that sally, as the Noldor sing yet, and many of the Orcs were borne backward into the fires below; but the men of Rog leapt even upon the coils of the serpents and came at those Balrogs and {smote} [fought] them {grievously} [valiantly], for all they had whips of flame and claws of steel, and were in stature very great. They {battered} [sent] them into {nought} [retreat], {or} [by] catching at their whips [they] wielded these against them[.] {, that they tore {them} [him] even as {they} [he] had aforetime torn the {Gnomes} [Noldor]; and {the number of Balrogs} that [this Balrog]perished was a marvel and dread to the hosts of Morgoth, for ere that day never had any of the Balrogs been slain by the hand of Elves or Men.}
Note: I have left the plural of the numbers of Balrogs as per the original text. The fabricated text that I introduced are only the change of some verbs:
1. smote replaced by fought.
2. battered replaced by sent.
and the words:
1. grievously replaced by valiantly.
2. nought replaced by retreat.
3. or to by.
I have added [they] in the last part. I added it because it sounded right to me. Is that ok with the rest?
Unfortunately, I had to delete the last part, I saw no way of saving it, without further altering the passage.