I loved all your additions, and the Legolas thing adds a very nice Bilbo-ish dimension to everything. I had only a few comments.
DE-EX-10: I had a question.
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DE-EX-10<HoME 12; Last Writings The Dwarves add that at that time Aulë gained them also this privilege that distinguished them from Elves and Men: that the spirit of each of the Fathers {(such as Durin) }should,
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Why is (such as Durin) removed? also in
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DE-EX-11: There is a minor grammatical issue that arises out of combining different sources.
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Then after long years he should arise and take up his kingship again [.....] and to bear once more their ancient names: of whom Durin was the most renowned in after ages, father of that kindred most friendly to the Elves, whose mansions were at Khazad-dûm.
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The italicized words should be changed to "his" and "name" respectively.
That was it!