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**lindil** · 07-31-2004, 04:13 AM

I must say, I think Aiwendil;s revision oand present tensing of the Horns of Ulmo is excellent and should stay if at all possible.

The only thing I would change is:
{Inland musics subtly magic} [But my heart recalleth sea musics] that {those} [the] {reeds} [waves] alone {could} [can] weave −}

-->
{Inland musics subtly magic} [Sea musics subtle magic ] that ....

It preserves some rather weak poetry but does takes the worst edge off it.

Of course I am dipping into this with only having read the last 10 or so posts.

So feel free to disregard this thread is I have missed something blatantly obvious to everyone else...

A+ for continuing effort my friends!

07-31-2004, 04:13 AM	#50
lindil Seeker of the Straight Path Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: a hidden fastness in Big Valley nor cal Posts: 1,680	my 2 cents on the horns of Ulmo I must say, I think Aiwendil;s revision oand present tensing of the Horns of Ulmo is excellent and should stay if at all possible. The only thing I would change is: {Inland musics subtly magic} [But my heart recalleth sea musics] that {those} [the] {reeds} [waves] alone {could} [can] weave −} --> {Inland musics subtly magic} [Sea musics subtle magic ] that .... It preserves some rather weak poetry but does takes the worst edge off it. Of course I am dipping into this with only having read the last 10 or so posts. So feel free to disregard this thread is I have missed something blatantly obvious to everyone else... A+ for continuing effort my friends! __________________ The dwindling Men of the West would often sit up late into the night exchanging lore & wisdom such as they still possessed that they should not fall back into the mean estate of those who never knew or indeed rebelled against the Light.