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Old 04-21-2009, 08:17 AM   #46
Aran e-Godhellim
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I agree with all your changes (I actually meant to change "mocking he set" to "mocking set," but forgot) except for line 188. I think "did tauntingly" fits better here.

And I used the spelling "casque" from a line earlier in the work: when Thingol receives the helm. I'm not sure if the Anglicized version is even correct; usually it means a large barrel.
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