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Woo, that is a fast development to a better editing!
I just wonder, can't we us 'trunk' in line 696 and leave 'tree' in line 699?
I am okay with line 697 unaltered.
Also 'guests' for Turin, Beleg and band is okay for me.
'his curse' could even refer to his curse on Andróg, since what came home was the counter curse of Andróg.
I would have wished for Andrógs name to be mentioned here to make the referenc clearer (only a view lines above Mîm curses the hoard of Glaurung), but I can go without. Should the readers work it out by themselves!
If you don't feel we need the bridge, I supose it can go.
Respectfully
Findegil
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