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Old 11-14-2011, 08:58 AM   #34
Findegil
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BL-EX-03: Agreed. We delet the two lines.

BL-EX-06: To better the image of the cloud we could replace the 'a cloud' by 'dark cloud'. But for to the rest of your doubts I have no answer right now. If I can't find anything better we will delet the passage.

BL-RG-11.7: Agreed, we take:
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The wars and wandering BL-RG-11.7{of the Gnomes}[that them befell]
this tale {tells not. Far from their homes}has not the space to tell;
they fought and laboured in the North.
Fingon daring alone went forth
and sought for {Maidros}[Maedron] where he hung;
BL-EX-10: We are coming nearer to agreement. I see your point of feet versus syllables. But for me it is very dificult to have less syllables and not feel that this interupts the rythem. More are easier to accept. What about:
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BL-EX-10 <GA But Felagund spoke ere he bade farewell:
'{But this}This I {will }say to{ you, Celegorn}[Celegorm] the fell,
by the sight{ that is} given me in this hour,
{that}by neither {thou}thine nor any power
{son of Fëanor}shall thy kin {regain the Silmarils ever unto world's end.}their Jewels regain
before the End; for all in vain

you swore. And this that we now seek
shall come indeed ‘neath the triple peak,
but never to your hands shall it fall.
Nay, your oath shall devour you all,
the sons of Fëanor;{, and deliver} to other {keeping} care
Lúthien’s{the} bride-price {of Lúthien}it will bear.'>
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