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Old 01-10-2011, 11:17 AM   #56
Ekimeniso
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[QUOTE=Findegil;597184]Part three of the text:
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172 ... but Fingon drove them in the end with heavy slaughter from the land, and pursued them far across the sands of Fauglith RB-SE-04 <GA , {pursued}pursuing them by the horsed archers even to the Iron Mountains.>.
1. There is the redundancy of pursued...pursuing
2. "pursuing them by..." sounds ungrammatical to me
3. Should be Anfauglith

Maybe:
Quote:
172 ... but Fingon drove them in the end with heavy slaughter from the land, and pursued them <GA {by} with the horsed archers> far across the sands of Anfauglith <GA even to the Iron Mountains.>.

Last edited by Ekimeniso; 01-10-2011 at 02:07 PM. Reason: Inserted "Maybe:"
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