NA-RG-73: Not perfect but maybe better then nothing:
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NA-RG-73 and {Flinding}[Guilin’s son] knew it {at the feet}before the throne of the king
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NA-RG-74: Isn't the reference here clear enough, so that we might drop the personal name:
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with the fleet-footed NA-RG-74{Fuilin's}fair youngling.
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NA-RG-76: Not what I would like to have, but maybe an idea starter:
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'Tis NA-RG-76{Flinding go-Fuilin}[Gwindor son of Guilin], whose {faith}goodwill of yore
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Na-SL-16: I agree that it is riscy to change line 1958-1961 in reference from Túrin to Gwindor, but I don't like to lose line 1961-1964. If we could find a new first half-line for 1961 we could delet 1958-1960. Otherwise I would rather change the reference then droop all the lines.
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Na-RG-85: What about
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danced undying in the deep {pasture}past;
NA-RG-83{of the gardens of the Gods; there Glingol shone
and Bansil bloomed with beams shimmering,
mothwhite moonlight from its misty flowers;}
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Na-RG-91 What about
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Thus fate it fashioned that in NA-RG-91{Fuilin}[the friend]'s house
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Na-RG-95 &
Na-RG-96: I like your suggested line, and I don't think the second half-line is to long (if my counting is correct, it has even one sylabel less then the first half-line).
Respectfully
Findegil