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Aiwendil · 11-05-2003, 04:29 PM

I suppose you may be right about "monsters".

But I still think it's important to the sense of the passage to suggest (though not explicitly state) that the forces involved are not mere Orcs.

"Troops" does not quite convey the proper meaning.

"Bands" sounds a bit awkward to me.

But I suppose one of them might do, if nothing better comes up.

Incidentally, if "monsters" is a problem here, it must also be a problem in the other place I used it in the ambiguous Balrog revision - which was, confusingly enough FG-B-04 in the original but has become FG-B-05 in this thread. It ought simply to be deleted there, I suppose.

11-05-2003, 04:29 PM	#51
Aiwendil Late Istar Join Date: Mar 2001 Posts: 2,224	I suppose you may be right about "monsters". But I still think it's important to the sense of the passage to suggest (though not explicitly state) that the forces involved are not mere Orcs. "Troops" does not quite convey the proper meaning. "Bands" sounds a bit awkward to me. But I suppose one of them might do, if nothing better comes up. Incidentally, if "monsters" is a problem here, it must also be a problem in the other place I used it in the ambiguous Balrog revision - which was, confusingly enough FG-B-04 in the original but has become FG-B-05 in this thread. It ought simply to be deleted there, I suppose.