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onewhitetree · 11-30-2001, 01:25 PM

I agree about "renewed," but another word that should at least be considered, for many of the same reasons, is "shall".

Also one should note the repetition of words related to light and warmth, especially compared to the overall message of the poem.

Oh dear, I'll stop before I get too into this. We don't want any overanalysis, by any means!

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11-30-2001, 01:25 PM	#11
onewhitetree Seeker of Syntax Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: The Scene of the Crime Posts: 264	I agree about "renewed," but another word that should at least be considered, for many of the same reasons, is "shall". Also one should note the repetition of words related to light and warmth, especially compared to the overall message of the poem. Oh dear, I'll stop before I get too into this. We don't want any overanalysis, by any means! [img]smilies/rolleyes.gif[/img] __________________ onewhitetree (also known as Kate) Well, I'M BACK.

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