Help with youre Fan Fictions

[Helkahothion]

I'm gonna take you up on that offer, I'm having trouble with a scene in the play...

Dialog? Anyway, send it trough [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]

Everybody: If you send something to me, I might ask you to send it again. I have hotmail and my spamfilter is on the maximum level and since I don;t kow your e-mail adresses by heart(a real shame) you end up in the spam mails and I might accidently delete it.

Now really who would like to read a book full of Law terms?

Maybe if you write something Tolkien related, it will go away.

Just kidding [img]smilies/biggrin.gif[/img]. I think that your problem is that you write in to many modern speech. The trick with writing is that you imagine yourself inside the story.
Make a character that resembles your own personalety. It is much easyer to write that way and make them react, sinc eyou are in the story yourself. I always call a character like that an insider. It came in very handy in my first story. Maybe you should try it.
If all means fail, send it to me and I will mess it up very good so you don't even WANT to write in those terms anymore [img]smilies/evil.gif[/img]

Let me know if it works.

Greetings,

Anuion