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Itinerant Songster
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: The Edge of Faerie
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Keeping the tension
I just thought I'd mention a piece of writing wisdom I came by that never fails to make the story more interesting. Avoid the easy ways out; they tend not to be realistic, and they tend also to kill the tension that could make for a better story. If you write a smooth entry or discussion, or if you convince someone rather easily, or if you defeat your opponents in battle or brawl too easily, it comes off as "half-baked", unrealistic, and the end result is a more boring story. So try and avoid the easy way through/out/around, and allow the tension in a scene to remain, or even build on it. That's one of the ways characters become more real to the other players, and it never fails to make the story more interesting. Happy writing!
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Great point LMP. A professor I had a few classes with gave me the great advice: "If nothing happens for more than 10 minutes real time, have somebody walk in with a gun, just to spice it up a bit." I suppose in our case, we could have a King's Man show up at inopportune moments. There is nothing more boring to write (not to mention read) than a story line with no "oh crap" moments.
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I'll attempt to have a short post up for Kathaani tomorrow, I sat down to write it tonight, but I've been in class for like eight hours today and I'm brain-frozen.
Coming up next: Hard and fast formation of the rescue party. Hopefully Meneltarmacil will bring Thornonmir aboard soon so that the rescuers can start making real plans. In the meantime, nice writing to all. Sophia
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Red Sox Nation
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hopefully my "save" on the RPG is ok, never done one before. Had to go to work before i could quite finish my post. will be up by this evening.
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Ghost Prince of Cardolan
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: The bottom of the ocean, discussing philosophy with a giant squid
Posts: 2,254
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I'm in, though details of my arrival are still pending. I'll try to fill in my save tomorrow.
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Sorry that TB12's save hasn't been filled in yet. I kept his post overnight to think about some things. I really like what he's written, but I think he'll want to collaborate a bit with Himaran before putting it up. So, thanks everyone for your patience with that.
![]() Now that everyone's in I'll get Kathaani's post up. Thanks. Sophia Menel when you say King's man do you mean Abarzadan? I don't think he really qualifies as a King's Man, more as an outcast who fits neither camp. I believe he's going to be taken care of by Marsillion, although your input is certainly welcome. [Edit#2] Kathaani's post is up on the game thread, however, with the two saves in between I fully expect to have to edit it for details and whatever happens with Marsillion, Thoronmir, and Abarzadan. If anyone else needs to get in responses that happen before Kathaani's declaration, pm them to me or post them here and I will edit them into the beginning of my post.
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The seasons fall like silver swords, the years rush ever onward; and soon I sail, to leave this world, these lands where I have wander'd. O Elbereth! O Queen who dwells beyond the Western Seas, spare me yet a little time 'ere white ships come for me! Last edited by Sophia the Thunder Mistress; 03-17-2005 at 01:09 PM. Reason: bold is so hopefully you'll all notice the newest edit |
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Desultory Dwimmerlaik
Join Date: Mar 2002
Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat.....
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Please try to get SAVE's filled in 48 hours from their posting. If you can't do that - then delete your SAVE and ask someone to backpost for you when you get around to finishing it.
Thanks! ~*~ Pio, Game Mod
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Seems like things are going a bit slowly - (everyone's busy, and I am as well!). Perhaps its time for someone to walk in with a gun... or at least an axe. - Himaran |
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Itinerant Songster
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: The Edge of Faerie
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It may not be a gun or an axe, but to my surprise, Mabalar discovers that one of his jailers is sympathetic. More to follow. How would y'all feel if we have another minor character?
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Desultory Dwimmerlaik
Join Date: Mar 2002
Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat.....
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Minor characters are always a nice addition - BUT please post a very brief bio of the fellow so all can have an idea how he look and acts.
Thanks! ~*~ Pio
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La Belle Dame sans Merci
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I love the idea of a sympathetic guardsman, LMP. Awesome. I'm totally for the idea.
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I think it's a good addition as well, LMP. I've been concerned about who Mabalar would interact with, so it solves one problem.
Fea, you can stay out of things until we reach Romenna if you want to, or you can post periodic updates somewhat like LMP has been doing now and then. You can have some storyline if you want or you can pretty much have an uneventful journey. At the very least you'll know you're with Ziraphel and probably whichever Guard Inzi knew from childhood. There are also likely some other household staff and perhaps some remnants of other Faithful families with you. This has been a busy week for me, but thankfully the weekend is here and I'll try to get a post up for Kath this evening or tomorrow afternoon. ~Sophe
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The seasons fall like silver swords, the years rush ever onward; and soon I sail, to leave this world, these lands where I have wander'd. O Elbereth! O Queen who dwells beyond the Western Seas, spare me yet a little time 'ere white ships come for me! |
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Itinerant Songster
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: The Edge of Faerie
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But let's not get carried away with derring do. Remember the goal, folks.
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Ghost Prince of Cardolan
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: The bottom of the ocean, discussing philosophy with a giant squid
Posts: 2,254
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I'll sneak around behind 'em whilst they're distracted (that is, after whosoever wisheth to speak to them doeth so.)
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Ash of Orodruin
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Menel:
I set you up. Go for it. |
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Itinerant Songster
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: The Edge of Faerie
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Since I've set myself up as the speaker for the King's men here, I had better see it through.
Himaran, there's one problem with your post: these King's Men will not be satisfied until they have names. So please put into the mouth of the leader of the King's Men, that demand. .... and respond as you will...... |
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Itinerant Songster
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: The Edge of Faerie
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Not only that, but the party themselves ought to think of the speed of the Kariborim before sneakng around to outwit King's Men, don't you think?
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Haunting Spirit
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Red Sox Nation
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I have posted what maybe considered a controversial addition to the story. As always i am am open to change.
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Ash of Orodruin
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TB12:
Abarzadan is thoroughly humbled. I do feel, however, that there is a problem with your approach. Abarzadan spoke with authority in my post, but in your post Marsillion states that he is a mere slave a bit after Abarzadan claimed to be the leader of the party. Despite the strength of Marsillion's position, I find it unlikely that the King's men would swallow the contradiction without question. Seeing that we had to find a non-violent ending to the episode, I do think that your solution was a good one. Also, it leaves room for future conflict between Abarzadan and Marsillion, which seems to be a prevalent theme already.What do the rest of you think? Last edited by Himaran; 04-13-2005 at 09:13 PM. |
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La Belle Dame sans Merci
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I moved my post so that the night ones came before it.
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This has been a great series of posts, guys!! Menel, Regin, Fea, LMP- good writing all of you! Fea, you make me laugh... womanly necessities...
![]() I've put Kathaani to sleep, so she should be alright during whatever interactions are going on amongst the men-folk. Just to let you all know, I'm graduating from college on Sunday afternoon, so this weekend I'll be more or less completely unavailable. Also next week sometime (not sure quite when yet) I'll be moving. I will definitely have internet access all that time, just not sure how much time I'll have to use it. Also, TB12 is my real-life brother (as I'm sure most of you guys have caught ), so he'll be driving halfway across the country to come to my graduation this weekend, so he'll be MIA too. Hopefully we'll both be able to get our next posts in within a reasonable amount of time, if not... very sorry, back with you ASAP. In the meantime, I think Inzi and Abar are quite capable of handling things around here So to recap, I probably won't be here this weekend, TB12 likewise. I'll try to update at the beginning of the week on how long the moving will take and when I will be doing it. Sophia
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The seasons fall like silver swords, the years rush ever onward; and soon I sail, to leave this world, these lands where I have wander'd. O Elbereth! O Queen who dwells beyond the Western Seas, spare me yet a little time 'ere white ships come for me! |
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La Belle Dame sans Merci
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Capable though Inzi may be (and for the compliment, my thanks), her alter ego <cough> me </cough> will be out of town this weekend also. I just found out I'm going to Boston, so from tonight when I go to bed until Sunday at the earliest, I'm completely unavailable.
Soph: it's amazing how much real life gets thrown into writing. A bunch of us were talking about the trip to Boston and some of the guys were all worried about carrying around bags and what could possibly be that crucial that you would drag a bag all over a city? I informed them, subtly, of course, and the girls all snickered while the guys all groaned. So yeah... looks like Abar's gonna be the capable one this weekend. I'll be back in a few days. Oh, and Soph, congratulations!
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Ash of Orodruin
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I'm here - just waiting for the plot to move along...
It does seem like a few players have disappeared, though.
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La Belle Dame sans Merci
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I'm here! I promise. Real life dragged me kicking and screaming into responsibility. Like the student council meeting I should be paying attention to. I... will post soon. After I do this. And after I work on the graduation slide show. And after I do my homework, eat something, do my chores, and pick out something to completely change my cousin's look, much like she did to me today. See? Stupid real life...
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Itinerant Songster
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: The Edge of Faerie
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We're not writing a novel here, friends. Granted, we've set the bar high, but if it's so high that we're afraid to take a chance, what's the point? Let's get this going. Better to say "oops" after a post than "doggone it if only" after the rp is cancelled. I need some more action from you guys before Mabalar's next post. Let's do it.
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Ghost Prince of Cardolan
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: The bottom of the ocean, discussing philosophy with a giant squid
Posts: 2,254
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Sorry for not posting in a long time. (I've really been neglecting my duties to this RPG lately...
) I'll post as soon as I can once I see what the plan for rescuing Mabalar is. I plan on carrying out the rescue mission rather than try to make a dash for Romenna. (I'll be on a road trip from June 16 until somewhere around June 29, so I'll try to do the best I can before then)Oh, and if somebody could please add a hunting knife to my bio (as I don't think I can edit it at this point since it's in piosenniel's post), that'd be good.
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Desultory Dwimmerlaik
Join Date: Mar 2002
Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat.....
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Menel
I added the hunting knife to your character bio. ~*~ Pio
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Eldest, that’s what I am . . . I knew the dark under the stars when it was fearless - before the Dark Lord came from Outside. |
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La Belle Dame sans Merci
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I've just posted. Inzi's group can see Romenna, so I recommend hurrying.
Just so it's common knowledge, I'm headed out of town for a few days, but I'll be back Tuesday night.
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Shade of Carn Dûm
Join Date: Feb 2004
Location: Tumunzahar/Nogrod
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Put up a post for Azarmano. In it he lets everyone know in his lowdest voice about the split up. I would kindly request Meneltarmecil to edit the end of his post to not leave before I do, as it does not make sense. If anyone has any problems with my post and/or in game acting please let me know.
- Regin
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Ghost Prince of Cardolan
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: The bottom of the ocean, discussing philosophy with a giant squid
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I've edited it. And thanks for adding the hunting knife, Pio.
I'll see if I can't make at least one more post before I leave on my great adventure.
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Shade of Carn Dûm
Join Date: Feb 2004
Location: Tumunzahar/Nogrod
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Meneltarmacil,
Thanks for your edit. - Regin
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