Poem parodies

[Bêthberry]

If I may, I shall take up Evisse the Blue 's wonderful Poem Parody thread and apply it not to Tolkien's Middle-earth but to our own perilous realm, our Barrow Downs forum. I hope Evisse won't deem this off-topic! (I don't know how I missed this thread when she started it, but searching over old pages of forums certainly shows I've missed several good threads. Here's to their resurrection also as time warrants!)

The Red Wheelbarrow
by William Carlos Williams

so much depends
upon

a red wheel
barrow

glazed with rain
water

beside the white
chicken



And now for something completely different, as they say...



The Green-knived Barrow
by WC Quilläms

so much pretends
upon

a green-knived
barrow

glazed with cryptic
posts

astride the black
screen


I'm still tinkering a bit with the scansion of 'posts' and 'screen' so I might be back to edit. I would really like to have similar word breaks like wheel/barrow and rain/water.