The Narn i Chîn Húrin: Beleg & Falivirn

[Aran e-Godhellim]

I found a few lines I think need fixing:

For:

Then NA-RG-17{Flinding}[Gwindor] fiercely, though fear shook him: {1105}

I prefer:

NA-RG-17{Then Flinding fiercely}[Fierce replied Gwindor], though fear shook him: {1105}

For:

of NA-SL-04{Gnomish lords}[Man and Elves] by night beleaguered {985}

I prefer:

of NA-SL-04{Gnomish lords}[the Noldorim] by night beleaguered {985}

And for:

and NA-RG-18{Flinding}[his friend] there laid his flickering lamp

I would rather:

and NA-RG-18{Flinding}[Gwindor] there laid his {flickering}[gleaming] lamp

For:

and NA-RG-21{Flinding}[Gwindor] go-{Fuilin}[Guilin] the feet claspéd

I prefer:

and NA-RG-21{Flinding go-Fuilin}[Gwindor Guilinion] {the feet claspéd}[did grasp his feet]

For:

and the names of knives and NA-RG-23.5{Gnomish}[Elvish] blades

I suggest:

and the names of knives[,] NA-RG-23.5{and Gnomish}[Noldorin] blades[,]

And for:

of NA-RG-07{Flinding go-Fuilin }[Guilin's son]? Shall {free}[great]-born NA-RG-07.5{Gnome}[Gwindor]

I prefer:

of NA-RG-07{Flinding go-Fuilin }[Guilin's son]? Shall NA-RG-07.5{free-born Gnome}[Gwindor the free]

For:

NA-RG-57{Flinding}[Gwindor] {go-Fuilin} the faithful, to his feet striding.

I prefer:

NA-RG-57{Flinding}[Gwindor] {go-Fuilin} [his friend], to his feet striding.

And, finally (for now), for NA-SL-12:

of Feanor}[that Finrod] founded {when they fled southward}] following Thingol;

I prefer:

of Feanor}[that Finrod] founded {when they fled southward;}[, and following Thingol,]