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King's Writer
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Okay here is the next passage from the Istari essay worth considering:
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Quentingolmo
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These are great additions. I have only two comments.
In ETA-SL-03.4 The sentence starting 'Thus he got his name' needs to be removed, since in the late note concerning the Blue Wizards it is said that his name is 'not now clearly interpretable.' I called this change ETA-SL-03.5. I think we should change the start of ETA-SL-03.8 to 'It has been told' since we've told that whole story right here in this text, so it cant be said to be 'elsewhere told.' Or we could say 'Elsewhere is it told in full' to distinguish it. Last edited by ArcusCalion; 12-14-2018 at 11:01 PM. |
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King's Writer
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ETA-SL-03.5: Agreed.
ETA-SL-03.8: What about ‘Elsewhere is told ETA-SL-03.9 <editorial addition at length> how it was ...’ Respectfully Findegil |
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Quentingolmo
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This is fine
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Quentingolmo
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I have another inclusion from The Sources of the Legend of Isildur's Death:
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King's Writer
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ETA-SL-03.9: Agreed.
Respectfully Findegil |
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Quentingolmo
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One more addition for the very end of this chapter after the current last sentence:
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