Time - A poem for the Elves - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

Joy · 03-09-2002, 01:34 AM

Time By Joy

The days are lenghtening,
yet the hour grows short.
Yesterday is a distant memory,
but tomorrow may never come.
Our doom has been pronounced
and we stand upon the shores
For soon shall the ships come
that will bear us across Time.

This is my first attempt at ME poetry (and for free verse, for that matter.)

[ March 09, 2002: Message edited by: Joy ]

Elenglin · 03-09-2002, 03:40 AM

You wrote that? [img]smilies/eek.gif[/img] Pretty it is!
I could never write something like that, in english I say. In finnish; millions of poems, but it's no use 'coz nobody could understand them if i'd put them in here [img]smilies/frown.gif[/img]
But still: Pretty poem [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Eowyn of Ithilien · 03-09-2002, 05:43 AM

the call of the waves
the shifting sands
the cry of the gulls
whisper "Undying Lands"

know it's very rough but just made it up...and the "poem for the elves" was gorgeous [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Nufaciel · 03-09-2002, 06:04 AM

Beautiful poem. You should try writing more.

Birdland · 03-09-2002, 09:14 AM

Wonderful poem Joy. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Elven-Maiden · 03-09-2002, 09:44 AM

That's so *sob* sweet!

Joy · 03-09-2002, 03:25 PM

[Elvis voice]
Thank you, Thank you very much.
[/Elvis voice]

It only took me a few minutes to write. I just kept repeating the phrase "The days are lenghtening" over and over. I'm going to keep at this. It is fun. I love writing poetry, been doing this for about 8 to 10 yrs, though I write Christian and Inspirational.

VanimaEdhel · 03-09-2002, 03:32 PM

If life is but a dream
And the day but never ends
If a frown is all I know
And all answers, "It depends"

If one day awake, but next to die
If I know not night from day
I will but then be happy still
Knowing you just looked my way.

Hmmm...Not the best poem I have written off the top of my head...but...pretty good...maybe I'll put it in its own folder...great poem to you though!
Amin mela llie (I love you all)!

Joy · 03-09-2002, 03:57 PM

That's good, Vanima. Keep it up. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Aralaithiel · 03-09-2002, 04:23 PM

That was awesome, Joy! You've gone & made the redheaded Eldarin Queen cry! *sniff, sob, snorrrrt - sorry about that! I do have a hanky handy!
Keep up the good works guys! We are blessed with some awesome writers here! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img]

Joy · 03-09-2002, 07:20 PM

Here's another:

Hope by Joy
Cry for the Dawn of ages Past.
Look with eyes forlorn
against the day that shall be last.
Across the Great Sea shall sail
the ships that Eldars once borne
to Land where Hope will prevail.

Weber · 03-09-2002, 07:25 PM

the poems r good

Weber · 03-09-2002, 07:27 PM

my sister knows someone who got 1000 $ 4 his poems

Joy · 03-09-2002, 11:52 PM

Weber, could you find our where the guy sold his poems. I have close to 25 poems that I'd like to get published.

Joy · 03-10-2002, 05:25 PM

Eowyn, didn't see you poem. Excellent job! [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img]

Weber · 03-10-2002, 05:52 PM

sure the 1 that got the $1000 is on my sisters forum MGOForum

Mayla Took · 03-10-2002, 05:55 PM

Do they have a website Weber?

Joy · 03-10-2002, 06:00 PM

I do know that Poetry.comgives away prize money for winning poems.

littlemanpoet · 03-10-2002, 07:55 PM

Poetry.com is in it to line their own pockets doing vanity press, at least for the most part. I got one of their books with one poem of mine in it and I was disgusted. The majority of the poems were really bad.

In the spirit of this thread, though:

The Sea calls with the cry of gulls,
the waves touch the shore with sighs of ever-morn,
calling us to leave these changeful lands
where leaves fall and trees are felled,
where mountains crumble and friends fall,
their doom unknown beyond Eldamar.

Beyond the Sea lie undying lands
where leaves never fall, flowers never fade,
the trees flourish, and our friends tarry.
We come, we come to see the light!
To the Sea! To the Sea where the gulls cry!

[ March 10, 2002: Message edited by: littlemanpoet ]

Joy · 03-10-2002, 08:29 PM

Wow, littlemanpoet! Excellent poem.

Mhoram · 03-11-2002, 01:02 AM

Quote:

[Elvis voice]
Thank you, Thank you very much.
[/Elvis voice]

Don't you mean Elfis?

littlemanpoet · 03-11-2002, 05:29 AM

Quote:

Wow, littlemanpoet! Excellent poem.

Thanks, Joy, for saying so, but I don't like how the first line of the second stanza and the last line of the first hit against each other wrong, if you know what I mean. Real Elves would do better, I'm thinking... [img]smilies/frown.gif[/img]

03-11-2002, 04:48 PM

Pretty Poem.

03-09-2002, 01:34 AM	#1
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	Time - A poem for the Elves Time By Joy The days are lenghtening, yet the hour grows short. Yesterday is a distant memory, but tomorrow may never come. Our doom has been pronounced and we stand upon the shores For soon shall the ships come that will bear us across Time. This is my first attempt at ME poetry (and for free verse, for that matter.) [ March 09, 2002: Message edited by: Joy ] __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-09-2002, 03:40 AM	#2
Elenglin Pile O'Bones Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Helsinki, Finland Posts: 24	You wrote that? [img]smilies/eek.gif[/img] Pretty it is! I could never write something like that, in english I say. In finnish; millions of poems, but it's no use 'coz nobody could understand them if i'd put them in here [img]smilies/frown.gif[/img] But still: Pretty poem [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ "Sinun pelloillasi on jättiläinen, suunnattoman suuri jättiläinen, ja hän on tulossa tähän suuntaan", koira sanoi. "Apua! Apua! Hän talloo jalkoihinsa sinun lampaasi. Hän on astunut Galathea-raukan päälle, ja se on lituskainen kuin kynnysmatto. Apua! Apua! Hän ruhjoo kaikki sinun pensasaitasi ja hän survoo kaiken viljasi. Sinun täytyy toimia rohkeasti ja nopeasti, isäntä, tai kohta sinulla ei ole mitään jäljellä! Apua!" Garm puhkesi ulvomaan.

03-09-2002, 05:43 AM	#3
Eowyn of Ithilien Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Australia Posts: 277	the call of the waves the shifting sands the cry of the gulls whisper "Undying Lands" know it's very rough but just made it up...and the "poem for the elves" was gorgeous [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ But of bliss and glad life there is little to be said, before it ends; as works fair and wonderful, while still they endure for eyes to see, are their own record, and only when they are in peril or broken for ever do they pass into song.

03-09-2002, 06:04 AM	#4
Nufaciel Wight Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Houston, Texas Posts: 133	Beautiful poem. You should try writing more. __________________ Member of Pervy Elf Fanciers Anonymous...I need professional help.

03-09-2002, 09:44 AM	#6
Elven-Maiden Shade of Carn Dûm Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Canada Posts: 297	That's so sob sweet! __________________ Tout ce qui est or ne brille pas, Tous ceux qui errent ne sont pas perdus. Mobilis in Mobile

03-09-2002, 09:14 AM	#5
Birdland Ghastly Neekerbreeker Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: the banks of the mighty Scioto Posts: 1,757	Wonderful poem Joy. Thanks for sharing it with us.

03-09-2002, 03:25 PM	#7
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	[Elvis voice] Thank you, Thank you very much. [/Elvis voice] It only took me a few minutes to write. I just kept repeating the phrase "The days are lenghtening" over and over. I'm going to keep at this. It is fun. I love writing poetry, been doing this for about 8 to 10 yrs, though I write Christian and Inspirational. __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-09-2002, 03:32 PM	#8
VanimaEdhel Etheral Enchantress Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wellesley College! Posts: 1,463	If life is but a dream And the day but never ends If a frown is all I know And all answers, "It depends" If one day awake, but next to die If I know not night from day I will but then be happy still Knowing you just looked my way. Hmmm...Not the best poem I have written off the top of my head...but...pretty good...maybe I'll put it in its own folder...great poem to you though! Amin mela llie (I love you all)! __________________ "I think we dream so we don't have to be apart so long. If we're in each others dreams, we can be together all the time." - Hobbes of Calvin and Hobbes

03-09-2002, 03:57 PM	#9
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	That's good, Vanima. Keep it up. [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-09-2002, 04:23 PM	#10
Aralaithiel Ghost Eldaran Queen Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: A remote mountain in Valinor Posts: 353	That was awesome, Joy! You've gone & made the redheaded Eldarin Queen cry! sniff, sob, snorrrrt - sorry about that! I do have a hanky handy! Keep up the good works guys! We are blessed with some awesome writers here! [img]smilies/smile.gif[/img] __________________ A lelyat, wen!* (Quenya Elvish for "You go, girl!"

03-09-2002, 07:20 PM	#11
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	Here's another: Hope by Joy Cry for the Dawn of ages Past. Look with eyes forlorn against the day that shall be last. Across the Great Sea shall sail the ships that Eldars once borne to Land where Hope will prevail. __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-09-2002, 07:25 PM	#12
Weber Animated Skeleton Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 31	the poems r good __________________ Luinevaug

03-09-2002, 07:27 PM	#13
Weber Animated Skeleton Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 31	my sister knows someone who got 1000 $ 4 his poems __________________ Luinevaug

03-09-2002, 11:52 PM	#14
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	Weber, could you find our where the guy sold his poems. I have close to 25 poems that I'd like to get published. __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-10-2002, 05:25 PM	#15
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	Eowyn, didn't see you poem. Excellent job! [img]smilies/wink.gif[/img] __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-10-2002, 05:52 PM	#16
Weber Animated Skeleton Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 31	sure the 1 that got the $1000 is on my sisters forum MGOForum __________________ Luinevaug

03-10-2002, 05:55 PM	#17
Mayla Took Wight Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Shire Posts: 152	Do they have a website Weber? __________________ Good Things Come in Small Packages. (And don't you forget it!) Pippin:"What is that?!?" Merry:"This, my friend, is a pint!" Pippin:"It comes in PINTS?!?....I'm getting one!" "Don't let your heads get too big for your hats! But if you don't finish growing up soon, you are going to find hats and clothes expensive." Bilbo to Merry and Pippin "Fool of a Took! This is a serious journey, not a hobbit walking-party. Throw yourself in next time, and then you will be no further nuisance. Now be quiet!" Gandalf to Pippin in Moria E-mail me at mailto:ThirdAgeHobbit@hotmail.comThirdAgeHobbit@hotmail.com</A> Oh, and please rate me. THANKS!

03-10-2002, 06:00 PM	#18
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	I do know that Poetry.comgives away prize money for winning poems. __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-10-2002, 07:55 PM	#19
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	Poetry.com is in it to line their own pockets doing vanity press, at least for the most part. I got one of their books with one poem of mine in it and I was disgusted. The majority of the poems were really bad. In the spirit of this thread, though: The Sea calls with the cry of gulls, the waves touch the shore with sighs of ever-morn, calling us to leave these changeful lands where leaves fall and trees are felled, where mountains crumble and friends fall, their doom unknown beyond Eldamar. Beyond the Sea lie undying lands where leaves never fall, flowers never fade, the trees flourish, and our friends tarry. We come, we come to see the light! To the Sea! To the Sea where the gulls cry! [ March 10, 2002: Message edited by: littlemanpoet ]

03-10-2002, 08:29 PM	#20
Joy Spirit of a Warrior Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Wandering Posts: 1,014	Wow, littlemanpoet! Excellent poem. __________________ God bless, Joy KingdomWarrior@hotmail.com http://kingdomWarrior.jlym.com As the hart panteth after the water brooks, so panteth my soul after thee, O God. My soul thirsteth for God, for the living God: when shall I come and appear before God?

03-11-2002, 04:48 PM	#23
Rohirrim Guest Posts: n/a	Pretty Poem.