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Old 10-28-2003, 05:29 PM   #1
Findegil
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Sting Fall of Doriath - Outlaws in Menegroth

The title Maédhros gave is not realy fitting for my Version, but here it goes:

Some conventions of my writing:
Normal Text is from the basic text that is mentioned above (when I change the basic-Text it will bementioned)
Bold Text source information, comments and remarks
{ } = text that should be deleted
[ ] = normalised text
<source > = additions with source information
example = text inserted for garmatical reason
/ / = outline expansion

The basic text is that of The Tale of the Nauglafring.
Since full-text quating is not appropirate any longer, I will only give the starting words of each paragraph of the basic text and all editions or delitions, but not the regular changes.

§17 (§293) RD-OM-01 Now therefore did {those}[some] of {Úrin}[Húrin]'s band murmur, and one said to the king: 'Lo, lord, our captain {Úrin}[Húrin], an old man and mad, has departed, but we have no mind to forego our gain.'

§18 (§294) Then said {Tinwelint}[Thingol] for neither was he untouched by the golden spell: RD-OM-02 {‘Nay then, know ye not that this gold belongs to the kindred of the Elves in common, for the Rodothlim who won it from the earth long time ago are no more, and no one has especial claim' to so much as a handful save only Úrin by reason of his son Túrin, who slew the Worm, the robber of the Elves; yet Túrin is dead and Úrin will have none of it; and Túrin was my man.’
§19 At those words the outlaws fell into great wrath, until the king said: }‘Get ye now gone, and seek not O foolish ones to quarrel with the Elves of the forest, lest death or the dread enchantments of Valinor find you in the woods. Neither revile ye the name of {Tinwelint}[Thingol] their king, for I will reward you richly enough for your travail and the bringing of the gold. Let each one now approach and take what he may grasp with either hand, and then depart in peace.’

§20 (§295) RD-OM-03 <editorial addition But Asgon rebuked his men and bowing to the king he left Doriath with his men in search for Húrin. But of there further fate or if they ever found him again no tale tells. And about Húrin><Q30{and} some have said, that he cast himself at last into the western sea, and so ended the mightiest of the warriors of mortal Men.> But<TT his words living after him bred estrangement between Elves and Men.>

Here I would end the chapter "The Wanderings of Húrin" and start with:

RD-OM-04 <WHThe Nauglamír
The Necklace if the Dwarves, ‘Sigil Elu-neath’
Necklace of the Woe of Thingol>

§21 taken out

§22 (§1) Now[ when Húrin and his Band had departed from Menegroth] came {Gwenniel}[Melian] to {Tinwelint}[Thingol] and said: ‘Touch not this gold, for my heart tells me it is trebly cursed. Cursed indeed by the dragon's breath, and cursed by RD-OM-05 {thy}[Orodreth's] lieges' blood that moistens it, and the death of those' they slew; but some more bitter and more binding ill methinks hangs over it that I may not see.’

§23 (§2) Then, remembering the wisdom of {Gwenniel}[Melian] his wife, the king was minded to hearken ... The value of that hoard no man could count, for amid the gold lay many gems, and these were very beautiful to look upon, for RD-OM-06 {the fathers of the Rodothlim}<based on The Flight of the Noldor in Sil77 more than any others of the Exiles> had <the house of Finarfin> brought <thence, memories of the bliss they had forsaken in>{ them out of} Valinor, a portion of that boundless treasury the {Noldoli}[Noldor] had there possessed.

§24a (§3) Now as he gazed {Tinwelint}[Thingol] said: ‘How glorious is this treasure! And{ I have not a tithe thereof, and} of the gems of Valinor [I have] none save that Silmaril that Beren won from {Angamandi}[Angband].’ But {Gwenniel}[Melian] who stood by said: ‘And that were worth all that here lies, were it thrice as great.’

§24b (§4) Then arose one from among the company, and that was Ufedhin[.]RD-OM-07 {, a Gnome; ... with the Orcs and soldiers of Melko also.}
As he stood in that place the spell of the gold had pierced the heart of Ufedhin more deeply ... might they but save the hoard from ruin.’

§25b (§5) RD-OM-08 {Then looked the king upon the gold and he looked upon Ufedhin, and that Gnome was clad very richly, ... the wayfarer in his halls. }Again looked {Tinwelint}[Thingol] upon the gold, and it shone yet more alluring fair, nor ever had the sparkle of the gems seemed so brilliant, RD-OM-09 <QS36 and the seed of the love of gold that was in his heart was waked to growth>[. And]{ and} Ufedhin said again: ‘Or in what manner, O King, dost thou guard that Silmaril of which all the world hath heard?’

§26 (§6) Now {Gwenniel}[Melian] warded it in a casket of wood bound with iron, and Ufedhin said it was shame so to set a jewel that should not touch aught less worthy than the purest gold. Then was {Tinwelint}[Thingol] abashed, and yielded[. ] RD-OM-10{, and … we take out the rest of this and the next 6 paragraphs until … and all these were so subtly made and so cunningly adorned that Tinwelint was glad beyond the hope of Ufedhin.’} RD-OM-11 <Q36 Wherefore he summoned the greatest of all craftsmen that now were in the western world, since Nargothrond was no more (and Gondolin was not known), the Dwarves of Nogrod{ and Belegost}, that they might fashion the gold and silver and the gems {(for much was yet unwrought) }into countless vessels and fair things{; and a marvellous necklace of great beauty they should make, whereon to hang the Silmaril}.

§27 (§7) But the Dwarves coming were stricken at once with the lust and desire of the treasure, and they plotted treachery. They said one to another: 'Is not this wealth as much the right of the Dwarves as of the elvish king, and was it not wrested evilly from Mîm?' Yet also they lusted for the Silmaril.> RD-OM-12 But as yet {the}[their] designs{ of Ufedhin} came to nought, for in no wise would {Tinwelint}[Thingol] suffer {or him or those of} the Nauglath to depart to Nogrod with or without that portion of{ the} unwrought gold{ that yet remained}, and he said: "How shall it be thought that after the weariness of your{ burdened} journeys hither I should let you so soon be gone, to noise the lack of courtesy of {Tinwelint}[Thingol] abroad in Nogrod? Stay now awhile and rest and feast, and afterward shall ye have the gold{ that remains} to work your pleasure on; nor shall aught of help that I or my folk may afford be wanting in your labour, and a reward rich and more than just awaits you at the end."

§28a (§8) RD-OM-13 {But they knew nonetheless that they were prisoners, and trying the exits privily found them strongly warded.} Being therefore without counsel they bowed before the king, and the faces of the Dwarf-folk show seldom what they think. Now after a time of rest was that{ last} smithying begun in a deep place of {Tinwelint}[Thingol]'s abode which he caused to be set apart for their uses[.]{, and what their hearts lacked therein fear supplied, and in all that work Ufedhin had a mighty part.}

§28b (§9) RD-OM-14 <LT2 – moved only a few paragraphs down Now come the Dwarves{ nonetheless over the bridge and} before the chair of {Tinwelint}[Thingol], and behold, the things of their workmanship they had conveyed thither in silken cloths, and boxes of rare woods carven cunningly. In other wise had {Úrin}[Húrin] haled the treasure thither, and half thereof lay yet in his rude sacks and clumsy chests; yet when the gold was once more revealed, then did a cry of wonder arise, for the things the Nauglath had made were{ more} wondrous{ far than the scanty vessels and the ornaments that the Rodothlim wrought of old}. Cups and goblets did the king behold, ... so cunningly adorned that {Tinwelint}[Thingol] was glad beyond the hope of {Ufedhin}[the Dwarves].>

§28c (§10) A golden crown they had made for {Tinwelint}[Thingol], who yet had worn nought but a wreath of scarlet leaves, and a helm too most glorious they had fashioned; and a sword of dwarven steel brought from afar was hilted with bright gold and damascened in gold and silver with strange figurings wherein was pictured clear the wolf-hunt of {Karkaras Knife-fang, father of wolves}[Charcharoth, the Red Maw]. That was a more wonderful sword than any {Tinwelint}[Thingol] had seen before RD-OM-15{, and outshone the sword in Ufedhin's belt the king had coveted. These things wereof Ufedhin's cunning, but}. And the Dwarves had made a coat of linked mail of steel and gold for {Tinwelint}[Thingol], and a belt of gold. Then was the king's heart gladdened, but they said: ‘All is not finished,’ and {Ufedhin}they had made a silver crown for {Gwenniel}[Melian], and{ aided by} the Dwarves had contrived slippers of silver crusted with diamonds, and the silver thereof was fashioned in delicate scales, so that it yielded as soft leather to the foot, and a girdle {he}they had made too of silver blended with pale gold. Yet were those things but a tithe of their works, and no tale tells a full count of them.

§28d (§11) Now when all was done and their smithcraft given to the king, then said {Ufedhin}[the Dwarves]: ‘O {Tinwelint}[Thingol], richest of kings, dost thou think these things fair?’ And he said: ‘Yea’; but {Ufedhin}[they] said: ‘Know then that great store ... , the Necklace of the Dwarves.’

§28e (§12) Then{ again} did {Tinwelint}[Thingol] doubt {Ufedhin's}[their] purpose, yet did he yield the boon, an they would suffer him to be present at that smithying.

§28f (§13) RD-OM-16 {None are that yet live,' quoth Ailios,' 'who have seen that most glorious thing, save only' Littleheart son of Bronweg, yet are many things told thereof.}[Many things were told of that most glorious thing.] Not only was it wrought with the greatest skill ... , and all its links were twined with baleful thoughts.

§28g (§14) Now however did they bear it before the king in its new-gleaming splendour; and then was the joy of {Tinwelint}[Thingol] king of the woodland Elves come to its crowning, and he cast the {Nauglafring}[Nauglamír] about his throat, and straightway the curse of Mîm fell upon him. Then said {Ufedhin}[the Dwarves]: ‘Now, O Lord, that thou art pleased beyond thy hope, perchance thou wilt grant the craftsmen thy kingly reward, and suffer them to depart also in joy to their own lands.’

§28h §15) But {Tinwelint}[Thingol], bewildered by ... , yet would it be small enough, seeing that the labour was of love and {of Ufedhin's}[the] desire that the golden hoard be not cast away and lost. What then do ye wish that I may grant?’

§28i (§16) RD-OM-17 {Then said Ufedhin scornfully: ‘For myself, nothing, O Lord; indeed the guestkindliness of thy halls for seven moons and three is more than I desire.’ }But the Dwarves said: ’This do we ask. For our labours{ during seven moons} each seven jewels of Valinor, and seven robes of magic that only {Gwendelin}[Melian] can weave, and each a sack of gold; but for{ our great labour during}[the] three moons in thy halls unwilling, we ask each three sacks of silver, and each a cup of gold wherein to pledge thy health, O King, and each a fair maiden of the woodland Elves to fare away with us to our homes.’

§28j (§17) Then was King {Tinwelint}[Thingol] wroth indeed, ... undying shame.

§28k (§18) RD-OM-18 {Now that demand they had made only by the design of Ufedhin, yet}[Yet] seeing the anger of the king's face they said: ‘Nay, but this is not all[.]{, for in payment of Ufedhin's captivity for seven moons seven stout Elves must come with us and abide seven times seven years among us as bondsmen and menials in our labour.’} RD-OM-18 <Q30 {'}Is not this wealth as much the right of the Dwarves as of the elvish king, and was it not wrested evilly from Mîm?> RD-OM-19 <Sil77 By what right does the Elvenking lay claim to the Nauglamír, that {was}[we] made {by our fathers for}[out of the gold of] Finrod Felagund who is dead? It has come to him but by the hand of Húrin the Man of Dor-lómin, who took it as a thief out of the darkness of Nargothrond.'

§28l (§19) But Thingol perceived their hearts, and saw well that desiring the Silmaril they sought but a pretext and fair cloak for their true intent;>{Thereat} and he arose {Tinwelint}[Thingol] from his seat, and calling summoned his weaponed thanes and warriors, that these surrounded the Nauglath{ and those Gnomes}. Then said he:RD-OM-20 { ‘For your insolence each three stripes with stinging withes shall ye receive, and Ufedhin seven, and afterwards will we speak of recompense.’
When this was done, and a flame of bitter vengeance lit in those deep hearts, he said:} ‘Lo, for your labour {of seven months} six pieces of gold and one of silver each shall have, and for your labours in my halls each three pieces of gold and some small gem that I can spare. For your journey hither a great feast shall ye eat and depart with good store against your return, and ere ye go ye shall drink to {Tinwelint}[Thingol] in elfin wine RD-OM-21{; yet, mark ye, for the sustenance of Ufedhin seven idle months about my halls shall ye each pay a piece of gold, and of silver two, for he has not aughth imself and shall not receive since he desires it not, yet methinks he is at the bottom of your arrogance}.’

§29 (§20) Then were the Dwarves paid their reward like common smiths of bronze and iron[.] RD-OM-22{, and constrained to yield once more therefrom payment for Ufedhin - ‘else,’ said the king, ‘never shall ye get him hence.’} Then sat they to a great feast and dissembled their mood; yet at the end the time of their going came, and they drank to {Tinwelint}[Thingol] in elfin wine, but they cursed him in their beards, and {Ufedhin}[some] swallowed not and spat the wine from {his}[their] mouth upon the threshold.

The discussion will follow in the next posting.

Respectfully
Findegil

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