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Old 05-09-2018, 12:52 PM   #1
Findegil
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A description of the island of Númenor

This is the first draft of the chapter A description of the island of Númenor in the part The Black Years.

In this chapter A description of the island of Númenor (IN) from UT is the basic text.

The editing markings are:
BY-HL-zz for Black Years, Head-Lines, marking all headlines for the chapters in this part.

IN-SL-zz for A description of the Island of Númenor, Story-Line, to document all changes that construct the main text.

Some conventions of my writing:
Normal Text is from the text that is mentioned in the source information of each insert.
Bold Text = source information, comments and remarks
{example} = text that should be deleted
[example] = normalised text, normally only used for general changes
<source example> = additions with source information
example = text inserted for grammatical or metrical reason
/example/ = outline expansion
Normally if an inserted text includes the beginning of a new § these is indicated by a missing “>” at the end of the § and a missing “<” at the beginning of the next.
Quote:
BY-HL-06 <A description of the island of Númenor
> IN-SL-01<Akallabêth It is said by the Eldar that Men came into the world in the time of the Shadow of Morgoth, ... and did deeds of great valour in the war against Morgoth.
Of them was sprung, ... But Eärendil came never back to the lands that he had loved.
In the Great Battle when at last Morgoth was overthrown and Thangorodrim was broken, ... And the lot of Men was unhappy.
But Manwë put forth Morgoth ... and Men marvelled to see that silver flame in the paths of the Sun.
Then the Edain set sail upon the deep waters, ... Númenórë in the High Eldarin tongue.
This was the beginning of that people ... yet their children were few.
Of old the chief city and haven of Númenor was in the midst of its western coasts, ... whom the Valar appointed to be the first King of the Dúnedain.
Now Elros and Elrond his brother were descended from the Three Houses of the Edain, ... and ruled the Númenóreans four hundred years and ten.>
IN-SL-02<UT; A description of the island of Númenor The account of the Island of Númenor that here follows ... disappeared in the Downfall.
Even such documents as were preserved in Gondor, ... The story of Ar-Pharazôn and his impious armada was all that remained generally known in later ages.
* * *
The land of Númenor resembled in outline a five-pointed star, ... and it was at all times the most populous region of Númenor.
The Mittalmar was raised above the promontories ... and they were believed to be sent by him from Aman to keep watch upon the Holy Mountain and upon all the land.
The base of the Meneltarma sloped gently into the surrounding plain, ... in which were the tombs of the Kings and Queens of Númenor.
But for the most part the Mittalmar was a region of pastures. in the south-west there were rolling downs of grass; and there, in the Emerië, was the chief region of the Shepherds.
The Forostar was the least fertile part; ... from which he could observe the mo¬tions of the stars.
The Andustar was also rocky in its northern parts, ... and hither in the earlier days the swift white ships of the Eldar of Eressëa came most often.
An about that place, ... but they did not reach the height or girth of the great groves of Númenor.
The river Nunduinë flowed into the sea at Eldalondë, and on its way made the little lake of Nísinen, that was so named from the abundance of sweet-smelling shrubs and flowers that grew upon its banks.
The Hyarnustar was in its western part a mountainous region, ... of which the chief was Nindamos.
In the Hyarrostar grew an abundance of trees of many kinds, ... From the days of Tar-Aldarion there were great plantations in the Hyar¬rostar to furnish timber for shipbuilding.
The Orrostar was a cooler land, ... especially in those parts near to the borders of Arandor.
The whole land of Númenor was so posed as if it had been thrust upward out of the sea, ... and there one pair ever dwelt and lived on the bounty of the King.
In Númenor all journeyed from place to place on horseback; ... and timber in which the Westlands were rich.
The Edain brought with them to Númenor the knowledge of many crafts, ... until the power of the Kings was spread to the coasts of the East.
Some metals they found in Númenor, ... with black-feathered arrows a full ell long from point to notch.
But for long the crews of the great Númenórean ships came unarmed among the men of Middle-earth; ... that iron was used against them by those to whom they had revealed it.
Beyond all other pursuits the strong men of Númenor took delight in the Sea, ... When six hundred years had passed from the beginning of the Second Age Vëantur, Captain of King's Ships under Tar-Elendil, first achieved the voyage to Middle-earth. He brought his ship Entulessë (which signifies "Return") into Mithlond on the spring winds blowing from the west; and he returned in the autumn of the following year. IN-SL-03<Aldarion and Erendis, Note 3 <{It was six hundred years after the departure of the survivors of the Atani [Edain] over the sea to Númenor that a ship first came again out of the West to Middle-earth and passed up the Gulf of Lhûn. Its}The captain and mariners were welcomed by Gil-galad; and thus was begun the friendship and alliance of Númenor with the Eldar of Lindon. The news spread swiftly and Men in Eriador were filled with wonder. IN-SL-04<Aldarion and Erendis, Note 3< Elsewhere in this essay it is explained that these Men dwelt about Lake Evendim, in the North Downs and the Weather Hills, and in the lands between as far as the Brandywine, west of which they often wandered though they did not dwell there. They were friendly with the Elves, though they held them in awe; and they feared the Sea and would not look upon it. It appears that they were in origin Men of the same stock as the Peoples of Bëor and Hador who had not crossed the Blue Mountains into Beleriand during the First Age.> Although in the First Age they had dwelt in the East, rumours of the terrible war 'beyond the Western Moun¬tains' {[i.e.}- Ered Luin{]} - had reached them; but their traditions pre¬served no clear account of it, and they believed that all the Men who dwelt in the lands beyond had been destroyed or drowned in great tumults of fire and inrushing seas. ... and they were able to converse haltingly about simple matters.
>IN-SL-05 Thereafter seafaring became the chief enterprise for daring and hardihood among the men of Númenor; and Aldarion son of Meneldur, whose wife was Vëantur's daughter, formed the Guild of Venturers, in which were joined all the tried mariners of Númenor; as is told in the tale that follows here.>
Some comments to the editing:
BY-HL-06: After we have set the stage in Middle-earth we will do the same for the island of Númenor.

IN-SL-01: I start here with the introduction from the Akallabêth. Since I wanted to tell the story of the Second Age in a more or less chronological way (as we did with the First Age), I had to split the text of the Akallabêth. And this intro does fit best here.

IN-SL-02: Here we change over to the basic text.

IN-SL-03: I expanded the description of the meeting of the Númenoreans with the men of Eriador with Note 3 from Aldarion and Erendis.

IN-SL-04: This insert is from a later part of the same note 3.

IN-SL-05: This only mark were we come back to the basic text. I considered if we have to change ‘Thereafter’ because the reference is now less clear than in the original text, but it still seem okay for me.

A short and straight forward chapter as it seems.
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