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Faramund was struggling with an answer when Athanar continued.
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This seems a bit doltish. How about the following?
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Athanar watched a smirk form on Faramund's mouth as he opened it to begin some retort. He chose to cut him off before he began.
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Or some such...
And this needs to change also:
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Faramund seemed to be somewhat lost in the beginning, but as he spelled the words he got more comfortable.
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... perhaps to this....
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Faramund seemed to be stalling, trying to find a way to save face.
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Essentially, Faramund is not an idiot or fool or dolt. He is a rebellious, arrogant, ungrateful son of a good lord, clever but prone to interpret what others do and say in a completely self-centered fashion. Make sense?