Scarburg Meadhall Discussion Thread

[littlemanpoet]

Faramund was struggling with an answer when Athanar continued.

This seems a bit doltish. How about the following?

Athanar watched a smirk form on Faramund's mouth as he opened it to begin some retort. He chose to cut him off before he began.

Or some such...

And this needs to change also:

Faramund seemed to be somewhat lost in the beginning, but as he spelled the words he got more comfortable.

... perhaps to this....

Faramund seemed to be stalling, trying to find a way to save face.

Essentially, Faramund is not an idiot or fool or dolt. He is a rebellious, arrogant, ungrateful son of a good lord, clever but prone to interpret what others do and say in a completely self-centered fashion. Make sense?