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09-18-2011, 06:43 AM
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Everlasting Whiteness
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: Perusing the laminated book of dreams
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To me it flows well. What I feel is missing is a comma.
"I have had a hard life, and a long." The natural pause in the sentence is then clearly indicated to match the way I pause automatically when reading it.
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