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Findegil · 02-16-2004, 02:18 AM

Why did you skip the ", for there are grievous hurts to Middle-earth which thou maybe shalt heal"?

Other wise it is more or less good. But I think we should delet "Ulmo beckoned to him at eve." It is a duplication of what we have said just before and in my view kills the flow of the passage.

Don't ask me about Oarni/Earni. I simply do not know.

Respectfully
Findegil

02-16-2004, 02:18 AM	#18
Findegil King's Writer Join Date: Jul 2002 Posts: 1,721	Why did you skip the ", for there are grievous hurts to Middle-earth which thou maybe shalt heal"? Other wise it is more or less good. But I think we should delet "Ulmo beckoned to him at eve." It is a duplication of what we have said just before and in my view kills the flow of the passage. Don't ask me about Oarni/Earni. I simply do not know. Respectfully Findegil