* *Revised Fall of Gondolin pt.2 [the transition]* *

[Aiwendil]

Maedhros wrote:

I would be ok using:
Then Turgon {king} [King] of Gondolin robed in white with a belt of gold, <TO tallest of all the [living] Children of the World, save Thingol,>

Are you guys ok with that then?

Looks good to me.

How did I know that you were going to say something like that. I think that if we used that in the earlier section, it should not be used exactly here. I wonder if we could get away mentioning her hair colour or if it would be better to delete the reference.

Yes - I suppose I can be a bit predictable.

I don't really see a need to insert mention of her hair color here; if it would come down to inventing a sentence that says that her hair is golden, I'm inclined not to do it. I think that lately we've been unconsciously straying toward greater freedom in terms of creative writing than we previously intended.

The relevant principle here is:

6. The actual words used by J.R.R. Tolkien or the editor or summarizer of his work may only be changed, including change by deletion or addition, when:
a) they are minimally changed to agree with statements elsewhere in the canon recognized as of greater validity or are replaced with words or phrases from later or alternate restatements of the same material for reasons of consistancy or are changed to agree with alternate phrasings used by Tolkien of the same or better validity
b) they are minimally changed to avoid great awkwardness of expression such as ungrammatical constructions or too great a difference in style from the passage or section/chapter into which they are now to be inserted.
c) they are minimally added to in order to expand a sentence fragments or an incomplete phrase into a construction that fits grammatically in the new environment
d) they are deleted to avoid redundancy in new passages compiled from more than one source
e) they are, in verse passages, minimal changes that do not add new information to the tale, to maintain the proper metre and rhyme or alliterative pattern of the original verse.


I don't think that a sentence describing Idril's hair is justifiable under any of those.