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[Aiwendil]

I suppose the tricky point is deciding whether "[and before they left Idril] . . ." is too great a liberty. This ties in with what I just said in the part 2 thread; I think that when Jallanite and I were looking at this (more than two years ago), such an insertion would have been considered too liberal.

But I suppose it can be justified under 6b.

I will think about this and get back to you.

Findegil wrote:

But I think we should delet "Ulmo beckoned to him at eve." It is a duplication of what we have said just before and in my view kills the flow of the passage.

I'm not sure that I agree. What we have said just before is that, in a general, long-term sense, he has developed this sea-longing. The sentence at hand indicates a specific evening when Ulmo beckons to him.

But I do think that this sentence is partially redundant with the following sentence. I propose making it:

Wherefore he built a great ship Eärrámë, Sea-wing, /*TE-D with white sails*/. /*TE-E One evening /*TE-D Ulmo beckoned to him/ [and] he {calls} [called] {Eärendel} [Eärendil] and they {go} [went] to the shore. There {is a skiff} [was Eärámë].