The Lingering Darkness Planning/Discussion Thread - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

piosenniel · 02-22-2004, 09:53 PM

Everdawn

I like how you've written this:

<< Cursing he returned to the beaten track and continued on his way, groggily swaying as he walked.The things im gonna do to that runt when I come across him he cursed inwardly falling down into one great heap and struggling to make his way upright once more. “I'll kill him!” he shouted. >>

Good characterization!

~*~ Pio, the lurking lingering darkness fan gurl

02-22-2004, 09:53 PM	#11
piosenniel Desultory Dwimmerlaik Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Pickin' flowers with Bill the Cat..... Posts: 7,779	Everdawn I like how you've written this: << Cursing he returned to the beaten track and continued on his way, groggily swaying as he walked.The things im gonna do to that runt when I come across him he cursed inwardly falling down into one great heap and struggling to make his way upright once more. “I'll kill him!” he shouted. >> Good characterization! ~*~ Pio, the lurking lingering darkness fan gurl __________________ Eldest, that’s what I am . . . I knew the dark under the stars when it was fearless - before the Dark Lord came from Outside.