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Findegil · 07-26-2004, 12:34 PM

While reading the text I will post anythink that is missing here.

Page 2:
§3: "... in the great hill of slain that the Orcs have raised ..." (Orcs is missing.)

§4: "..., and be drove away these evil folk into Hithlum, ..." must be "..., and he drove away these evil folk into Hithlum, ..."

last §: "..., but at last be was overwhelmed ..." must be "..., but at last he was overwhelmed ..."

Page 3:
§1: "... and at the least be was not straved, ..." must be "... and at the least he was not straved, ..."

Page4:
last but one §: "... then surely shall you come to him, withersoever yon turn." must be "... then surely shall you come to him, withersoever you turn."

Page 5:
§7: "... foam-crest flying in the wind. Then the channel, drowning it ..." must be "... foam-crest flying in the wind. Then the river was thrust back, and the incoming flood swept roaring up the channel, drowning it ..."

Page 6:
§2: "... for the sea drew him, and be was not willing ..." must be "... for the sea drew him, and he was not willing ..."

§5: "... but when be turned southward ..." must be "... but when he turned southward ..."

§7: "... across the miles of the sea, as be drew near to the ..." must be "... across the miles of the sea, as he drew near to the ..."

Page 7:
§6: "... and already a host of foes is come between thee and thy goal." the "thee" is missing.

§9: "That which your heart hath ever sought," answered Ulmo: "to find Turgon, ..." The double quote is missing.

Page 8:
§2: "... so valiant of the High Folk of the West. " must be "... so valiant of the High Folk of the West." (At the end a blank was added inside the double quote.)

§7: "... or liftes in hills of wrath that broke upon the Shadowy Isles," until remote..." The double quote after Isles, was originaly a footnote marker and must be deleted.

Page 9:
§8: "Remember that the last hope of the Noldor cometh from the Sea?" must be "Remember that the last hope of the Noldor cometh from the Sea?"

Page 13:
§2: "Death is all about us," and Tuor." must be ""Death is all about us," said Tuor."

Page 14:
§2 "... and under the cloak we may pass now with out more doubt." (The "h" in "with" is missing.)

last §: "They are the folk of Throndor, who dwelt once even on Thangorodrim {ere Morgoth grew so mighty, and} dwell {now} in the Mountains of Turgon {since the Fall of Fingilfin}." I did not check the old discussion, but what ever was intended, the form it took is not good. I would at least take the and and the koma back iton the passage. "They are the folk of Throndor, who dwelt once even on Thangorodrim{ ere Morgoth grew so mighty}, and dwell{ now} in the Mountains of Turgon{ since the Fall of Fingilfin}."

Page 15:
§1: "And if that be good or ill. you alone can say." must be "And if that be good or ill, you alone can say."

Page 16:
§4: "... and Tuor marvelled to see to beauty." must be "... and Tuor marvelled to see its beauty."

Page 19:
§3: "... and in coining to a high sward ..." must be "... and in coming to a high sward ..."

So fare for the moment. I will continue when ever I have time to read on. But it will become even harder since further on I will have to check some of our old discussions when I can not remember the outcome.

Respectfully
Findegil

P.S.: In such times Antione is mostly missed. This check reading of this eaysiest part of the text toke me 4 hours. I hope desperatly that some one has the text in a editable form, because I couldn't copy out of the pdf-file. And if nobody has than we have to do Antione's work all over again.

07-26-2004, 12:34 PM	#11
Findegil King's Writer Join Date: Jul 2002 Posts: 1,721	While reading the text I will post anythink that is missing here. Page 2: §3: "... in the great hill of slain that the Orcs have raised ..." (Orcs is missing.) §4: "..., and be drove away these evil folk into Hithlum, ..." must be "..., and he drove away these evil folk into Hithlum, ..." last §: "..., but at last be was overwhelmed ..." must be "..., but at last he was overwhelmed ..." Page 3: §1: "... and at the least be was not straved, ..." must be "... and at the least he was not straved, ..." Page4: last but one §: "... then surely shall you come to him, withersoever yon turn." must be "... then surely shall you come to him, withersoever you turn." Page 5: §7: "... foam-crest flying in the wind. Then the channel, drowning it ..." must be "... foam-crest flying in the wind. Then the river was thrust back, and the incoming flood swept roaring up the channel, drowning it ..." Page 6: §2: "... for the sea drew him, and be was not willing ..." must be "... for the sea drew him, and he was not willing ..." §5: "... but when be turned southward ..." must be "... but when he turned southward ..." §7: "... across the miles of the sea, as be drew near to the ..." must be "... across the miles of the sea, as he drew near to the ..." Page 7: §6: "... and already a host of foes is come between thee and thy goal." the "thee" is missing. §9: "That which your heart hath ever sought," answered Ulmo: "to find Turgon, ..." The double quote is missing. Page 8: §2: "... so valiant of the High Folk of the West. " must be "... so valiant of the High Folk of the West." (At the end a blank was added inside the double quote.) §7: "... or liftes in hills of wrath that broke upon the Shadowy Isles," until remote..." The double quote after Isles, was originaly a footnote marker and must be deleted. Page 9: §8: "Remember that the last hope of the Noldor cometh from the Sea?" must be "Remember that the last hope of the Noldor cometh from the Sea?" Page 13: §2: "Death is all about us," and Tuor." must be ""Death is all about us," said Tuor." Page 14: §2 "... and under the cloak we may pass now with out more doubt." (The "h" in "with" is missing.) last §: "They are the folk of Throndor, who dwelt once even on Thangorodrim {ere Morgoth grew so mighty, and} dwell {now} in the Mountains of Turgon {since the Fall of Fingilfin}." I did not check the old discussion, but what ever was intended, the form it took is not good. I would at least take the and and the koma back iton the passage. "They are the folk of Throndor, who dwelt once even on Thangorodrim{ ere Morgoth grew so mighty}, and dwell{ now} in the Mountains of Turgon{ since the Fall of Fingilfin}." Page 15: §1: "And if that be good or ill. you alone can say." must be "And if that be good or ill, you alone can say." Page 16: §4: "... and Tuor marvelled to see to beauty." must be "... and Tuor marvelled to see its beauty." Page 19: §3: "... and in coining to a high sward ..." must be "... and in coming to a high sward ..." So fare for the moment. I will continue when ever I have time to read on. But it will become even harder since further on I will have to check some of our old discussions when I can not remember the outcome. Respectfully Findegil P.S.: In such times Antione is mostly missed. This check reading of this eaysiest part of the text toke me 4 hours. I hope desperatly that some one has the text in a editable form, because I couldn't copy out of the pdf-file. And if nobody has than we have to do Antione's work all over again.