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JennyHallu · 03-09-2006, 02:20 PM

Ok, that's um *gulp* sort of a rehabilitation.

Um...critiques on writing...

Your writing itself is very good. I'm not really a fan of gore-style horror, however. Horror is the weakest kind of fear...horror is the fear you have when you know what's going to happen and you know what is wrong. Terror is the kind of fear you have when you know what the bad thing is, but you don't necessarily know what's going to happen. That's stronger.

But dread, the strongest level of fear, is the feeling you get when you know you are being watched, when you're lying safe at home in the dark and you hear a noise, and you don't know if there's someone there or not. Just a vague feeling that things are about to go wrong...that's what scares me most.

You do well at creating a feeling of horror, and you've been improving throughout the game at terror...but I don't yet really get a feeling of dread. I think you move from dread to horror too quickly, maybe?

Suggested reading: Lost Boys by Orson Scott Card, Watchers by Dean Koontz (not the creepiest of his novels, but the most memorable)...I can't think of any more off the top of my head.

TO THE VILLAGE:

Well played, and you got me in the end. Anguirel, special kudos to you. You were a slippery customer, and we wolves wanted to kill you for days but didn't dare.

03-09-2006, 02:20 PM	#11
JennyHallu The Pearl, The Lily Maid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: In my luxury Barrow, snuggled up in a pile of satin pillows, eating fresh fruit. Posts: 1,628	Ok, that's um gulp sort of a rehabilitation. Um...critiques on writing... Your writing itself is very good. I'm not really a fan of gore-style horror, however. Horror is the weakest kind of fear...horror is the fear you have when you know what's going to happen and you know what is wrong. Terror is the kind of fear you have when you know what the bad thing is, but you don't necessarily know what's going to happen. That's stronger. But dread, the strongest level of fear, is the feeling you get when you know you are being watched, when you're lying safe at home in the dark and you hear a noise, and you don't know if there's someone there or not. Just a vague feeling that things are about to go wrong...that's what scares me most. You do well at creating a feeling of horror, and you've been improving throughout the game at terror...but I don't yet really get a feeling of dread. I think you move from dread to horror too quickly, maybe? Suggested reading: Lost Boys by Orson Scott Card, Watchers by Dean Koontz (not the creepiest of his novels, but the most memorable)...I can't think of any more off the top of my head. TO THE VILLAGE: Well played, and you got me in the end. Anguirel, special kudos to you. You were a slippery customer, and we wolves wanted to kill you for days but didn't dare. __________________ <=== Lookee, lookee, lots of IM handles!