Tapestry of Dreams, Part 2 Discussion - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

mark12_30 · 03-18-2008, 09:05 PM

lmp,

Be blunt about exactly what you'd like changed, and I will make it so... meanwhile the pillow calleth.

Sigh no more, pine, til the wind of the morn
Fall, moon; dark be the land;
hush, hush, oak, ash and thorn,
hushed be all water til dawn is at hand.

littlemanpoet · 03-19-2008, 03:58 AM

Raefindan deems himself culpable for Aeron's death because in his mind he lied to himself; in his will he chose to do so; and in his actions he did so. These self-deceits, as minor as they seemed, left him open to the manipulations of Tharonwë.

So he is most apt to say something like, "I own Aeron's death in mind, will, and deed, though if not for the evil mind of he who killed Gwyllion I would not have done so."

However that is tortured, and I cannot think in this short time of a better way to say it.

mark12_30 · 03-19-2008, 05:10 AM

Let me know if you'd like me to mod the post, otherwise I assume-- forward.

03-18-2008, 09:05 PM	#1
mark12_30 Stormdancer of Doom Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Elvish singing is not a thing to miss, in June under the stars Posts: 4,349	Raefindan's poetic diction... lmp, Be blunt about exactly what you'd like changed, and I will make it so... meanwhile the pillow calleth. Sigh no more, pine, til the wind of the morn Fall, moon; dark be the land; hush, hush, oak, ash and thorn, hushed be all water til dawn is at hand. __________________ ...down to the water to see the elves dance and sing upon the midsummer's eve.

03-19-2008, 05:10 AM	#3
mark12_30 Stormdancer of Doom Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Elvish singing is not a thing to miss, in June under the stars Posts: 4,349	Let me know if you'd like me to mod the post, otherwise I assume-- forward. __________________ ...down to the water to see the elves dance and sing upon the midsummer's eve.

03-19-2008, 03:58 AM	#2
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	Raefindan deems himself culpable for Aeron's death because in his mind he lied to himself; in his will he chose to do so; and in his actions he did so. These self-deceits, as minor as they seemed, left him open to the manipulations of Tharonwë. So he is most apt to say something like, "I own Aeron's death in mind, will, and deed, though if not for the evil mind of he who killed Gwyllion I would not have done so." However that is tortured, and I cannot think in this short time of a better way to say it.