An Adventure of Hobbit Proportions Discussion Thread - The Barrow-Downs Discussion Forum

Legate of Amon Lanc · 04-21-2008, 11:40 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Valier

I guess we will follow the road across the river near bugeford then North from there. Does that sound right? Like you LMP suggested in your previous post.

That means, through Whitfurrows, where the company turns northwards?

In any case, looks like I'd better gear up...

Legate of Amon Lanc · 04-22-2008, 04:50 AM

Hey, hey, whoa, wait, elempi, what was that?

I don't stand on it, of course, and I may join later, but I imagined it quite differently... you covered many miles' and a day's walk in just a few lines... hey, I imagined that it will be longer and that I am going to join you in the fields even BEFORE Whitfurrows... and you not only came into it, but have already passed it! Whoa, whoa! If it's like that, I would prefer putting in my own narration between it, please...

EDIT (to avoid double-posting): That is: is no one going to add anything else before the party enters the fields? If not, then I would probably ask you, lmp, to remove the last lines of your post (after the paragraph ending "...all of them.") and then I will add my own post. That's probably the best way it could be done.

EDIT 2: All right, I have already written a large part of the post, where I am simply counting with that elempi is going to remove the lines I mentioned above and that no one wants to add anything between it. I am leaving now, but will be back in the evening (in some six hours at maximum), and I hope to post it today, or if not, then tomorrow morning.

littlemanpoet · 04-22-2008, 08:56 AM

Post altered as requested. I've added a bit about Snatch nosing your character out without knowing anything about him. Have a look-see.

Legate of Amon Lanc · 04-22-2008, 10:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by littlemanpoet

Post altered as requested. I've added a bit about Snatch nosing your character out without knowing anything about him. Have a look-see.

Thanks

Hm, I have already written something that would fit better with the original unaltered text

(after you removed that end), anyway... I will simply post what I have as soon as I have it complete...

Legate of Amon Lanc · 04-23-2008, 02:55 AM

Done! The group has now another person following them.

I'm going to leave to you what to do in this situation, or who will react, if they will react - if someone had noticed that a person who went another direction is now at their heels again; if anyone is going to wonder if and/or why the person is following the group... Decide based upon your characters, if you think they would spot it, and how they would react (tell that to others, or do something themselves, or just observe). Even if no one reacts, the strange character will simply keep following them, so it will ultimately culminate - sooner or later.

I kept the portrayal of my character intentionally vague, he is not known to the other characters and so what is written about him is only a little more than what the others can really know about him. This way also, the potential reactions of your characters on him can be more "natural".

04-22-2008, 04:50 AM	#2
Legate of Amon Lanc A Voice That Gainsayeth Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In that far land beyond the Sea Posts: 7,431	Hey, hey, whoa, wait, elempi, what was that? I don't stand on it, of course, and I may join later, but I imagined it quite differently... you covered many miles' and a day's walk in just a few lines... hey, I imagined that it will be longer and that I am going to join you in the fields even BEFORE Whitfurrows... and you not only came into it, but have already passed it! Whoa, whoa! If it's like that, I would prefer putting in my own narration between it, please... EDIT (to avoid double-posting): That is: is no one going to add anything else before the party enters the fields? If not, then I would probably ask you, lmp, to remove the last lines of your post (after the paragraph ending "...all of them.") and then I will add my own post. That's probably the best way it could be done. EDIT 2: All right, I have already written a large part of the post, where I am simply counting with that elempi is going to remove the lines I mentioned above and that no one wants to add anything between it. I am leaving now, but will be back in the evening (in some six hours at maximum), and I hope to post it today, or if not, then tomorrow morning. __________________ "Should the story say 'he ate bread,' the dramatic producer can only show 'a piece of bread' according to his taste or fancy, but the hearer of the story will think of bread in general and picture it in some form of his own." -On Fairy-Stories Last edited by Legate of Amon Lanc; 04-22-2008 at 06:22 AM.

04-23-2008, 02:55 AM	#5
Legate of Amon Lanc A Voice That Gainsayeth Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: In that far land beyond the Sea Posts: 7,431	Done! The group has now another person following them. I'm going to leave to you what to do in this situation, or who will react, if they will react - if someone had noticed that a person who went another direction is now at their heels again; if anyone is going to wonder if and/or why the person is following the group... Decide based upon your characters, if you think they would spot it, and how they would react (tell that to others, or do something themselves, or just observe). Even if no one reacts, the strange character will simply keep following them, so it will ultimately culminate - sooner or later. I kept the portrayal of my character intentionally vague, he is not known to the other characters and so what is written about him is only a little more than what the others can really know about him. This way also, the potential reactions of your characters on him can be more "natural". __________________ "Should the story say 'he ate bread,' the dramatic producer can only show 'a piece of bread' according to his taste or fancy, but the hearer of the story will think of bread in general and picture it in some form of his own." -On Fairy-Stories

04-22-2008, 08:56 AM	#3
littlemanpoet Itinerant Songster Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: The Edge of Faerie Posts: 7,066	Post altered as requested. I've added a bit about Snatch nosing your character out without knowing anything about him. Have a look-see.