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Findegil · 09-08-2015, 05:29 AM

After preforming the comparison between our Valaquenta-text and that of LQ1/2 and Sil77. I found out that Arvegil145 was reffering to a passages in what will become Of the Begining of Time, when he said that we have to change the 7 great once.

Well that makes think easier. I think at this point the narative we will simply delet the passages and I have incooperated that change into my draft.

About Of the coming of the Elves: well, as said before, making a draft is easy but does not prove that it will be found incooperatable by the group. I am not going to produce my draft here right now. This is clearly the wrong place and it is the wrong time as I am already spend to much time on the other activities here. The chapter is a wild mixture of text from very diffrent sources. I had to changes tens often in MT passages, but I was never forced to rewrite a sentence. But I did not use these passages as solid block.

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Findegil

Arvegil145 · 09-12-2015, 08:56 AM

Also, have you included Morwë and Nurwë in The Coming of the Elves?

Findegil · 09-12-2015, 04:08 PM

Yes, I included Morwë and Nurwë, so I think this will need discussuion once we reach that point.

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Findegil

gandalf85 · 02-11-2019, 06:28 PM

It's pretty crazy how old this thread is and how long this project has been ongoing. I read through the Ainulindale chapter, I only have minor comments.

1) In §20 the "flame imperishable" is lowercase. This is how it is in Morgoth's Ring, but everywhere Tolkien capitalized it. I think we should capitalize it here to be consistent.

2) In §26 there is a reference to "the Eä". It looks like this was changed from "the World". I can't find any instances of Tolkien using "the" before Eä, I think we should remove "the".

Findegil · 02-12-2019, 03:08 PM

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It's pretty crazy how old this thread is ...

To be sure this is by fare not the oldest thread!

I agree to both changes. Just to make it easier to find ‘the Eä’ is in §23 not §26.

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Findegil

gandalf85 · 02-13-2019, 07:50 PM

Oops, yes I meant §23.

09-08-2015, 05:29 AM	#1
Findegil King's Writer Join Date: Jul 2002 Posts: 1,721	After preforming the comparison between our Valaquenta-text and that of LQ1/2 and Sil77. I found out that Arvegil145 was reffering to a passages in what will become Of the Begining of Time, when he said that we have to change the 7 great once. Well that makes think easier. I think at this point the narative we will simply delet the passages and I have incooperated that change into my draft. About Of the coming of the Elves: well, as said before, making a draft is easy but does not prove that it will be found incooperatable by the group. I am not going to produce my draft here right now. This is clearly the wrong place and it is the wrong time as I am already spend to much time on the other activities here. The chapter is a wild mixture of text from very diffrent sources. I had to changes tens often in MT passages, but I was never forced to rewrite a sentence. But I did not use these passages as solid block. Respectfuly Findegil Last edited by Findegil; 09-08-2015 at 05:42 AM.

09-12-2015, 04:08 PM	#3
Findegil King's Writer Join Date: Jul 2002 Posts: 1,721	Yes, I included Morwë and Nurwë, so I think this will need discussuion once we reach that point. Respectfuly Findegil

02-11-2019, 06:28 PM	#4
gandalf85 Wight Join Date: Mar 2014 Posts: 121	It's pretty crazy how old this thread is and how long this project has been ongoing. I read through the Ainulindale chapter, I only have minor comments. 1) In §20 the "flame imperishable" is lowercase. This is how it is in Morgoth's Ring, but everywhere Tolkien capitalized it. I think we should capitalize it here to be consistent. 2) In §26 there is a reference to "the Eä". It looks like this was changed from "the World". I can't find any instances of Tolkien using "the" before Eä, I think we should remove "the".

02-13-2019, 07:50 PM	#6
gandalf85 Wight Join Date: Mar 2014 Posts: 121	Oops, yes I meant §23.