TE-SL-32/33: I interpreted the Cruels of the North as the Elves, but I suppose this does not work with the fact that he does not know what the Eldar are. I will then agree to the change, so long as the Ettenmoors are removed, since as you say, they do not fit the theme of the rest of the locations. However, I would make some small grammatical changes to keep it looking good:
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There is no more TE-SL-32 <editorial addition told of Tal-Elmar and the people of Agar,>{ At the foot of the page my father wrote 'Tal-Elmar' twice, and his own name twice; and also} TE-SL-33 <editorial addition but it is said that> {'}Tal-Elmar {in}came later to Rhovanion{', '} and Wilderland{'}, {'}/and that he saw /Anduin the Great River{','}and the Sea of Rhûn{','Ettenmoors'}.>
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06-06-2018, 08:32 PM
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