* * Valaquenta Some proposals for a new project ... * *

[Findegil]

1) Vala-02.45: The addition about Varda from MT is okay for me.

4) Vala-04.3: I think the attributes of being a death goddess were lost for Niënna in the later legendary. So I agree to gandalf85 that this addition is critical.

5) Vala-05.25: Of these names only ‘Tuivána’ is used later. Nonetheless the adition could be considered.

6) Vala-06: Ómar is used later, so we could add him, but I think it was by intention that the sub-chapter ends with Olorin.

Vala-07.23b: In thah way it would mean that Eru was a created power, which is not true.

Vala-07: I am okay with removing the apostrophes.

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Findegil

[ArcusCalion]

Perhaps "He was the greatest power created by Eru."

[Findegil]

Vala:
That dosn’t sound right either to me, since it would suggest that there were other creators. To be honest, I do not see the need to remove the redundance between the text and the footnote. It is not a full redundance; otherwise the footnote would useless. In the way it stands the footnote does make the message more specific.

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Findegil

[ArcusCalion]

It does not suggest that at all to be honest, I'm not sure what you're getting at. I was more concerned with the flow of it, since at the moment it is very awkward.

[Findegil]

Vala-07.23: What exactly is awakward on the sentence?

For he was the greatest power under Eru (that means the greatest created power).

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Findegil

[ArcusCalion]

Ah i missed the parentheses and the 'that means.' this does make it flow better.

[Arvegil145]

I found an interesting passage in PE 15, p. 96:

Eriol asks innocently is not Aule him that we call Wéland and they (Rúmil?) laughing says no and tells of Velindo or Gwilion the fay - one of Aule's folk who was sent by Aule into the world to fetch at his need some of the good heavy red gold of the dwarves.

There his pride swelled by reason of the amazement of men and dwarves at his skill; and he never returned to Aule but set up on his own - and was once famous far and wide but with the fading of the fairies his power has waned.

He was not wicked but very vain - Eriol touches on the Böðvildr legend and Rúmil says that if it is true it shows the vanity of Wéland (Niðhad must be a dwarf king).

Mind you, in the early legendarium 'fays' were the precursors of the Maiar.

If we take away the references to Eriol and Rumil, and replace 'fairies' with 'Elves', I think we can incorporate this passage into TNS.